The characters are a little bit flat, and your writing isn't very descriptive However, the story is enjoyable. I can't understand why you don't have more reviews...

Hanakotoba,

It is my pleasure to review works like yours. I understand the feeling of pouring your soul into something and it not take off as you hoped. Your story is too good for that to be allowed to happen.

To the story: I must say that I did not see that one coming! I had thought the previous prince's demise was shady, but I did not expect Suisen to be the guy. You did a good job though of putting hints and inklings in the previous chapters so that this doesnt seem sudden or contrived as a plot device (which, I suppose, it technically is). What I'm getting at is it was subtle enough not to be noticed immediately (like Jafar in Aladdin), but it makes sense in hindsight, and those are the best sorts of plot twists. :)

I look forward to (hopefully) some romance between Rose (who I love as a character, by the way) and Ethan, and maybe some more moments between Hina and Rai (hopefully ;P). Though I am a male, I'm a sucker for a cute love story ;)

You're telling me that this isn't even the plot? That this is going MORE places? I thought the whole "magic slice of life harem competition" premise was good enough, but I can't wait to see where you go with this story! You keep on writing, and I look forward to seeing the places you go!

Have a wonderful day/night and take care!

Steve S.

I love the Japanese and Chinese influence in the story! I love the Asian cultures, so this is right up my alley, genre-wise. I really like the compounded setting, but I would like to see the background of the universe a little more. How did medieval technology mix with oriental? Where did this magic come from, and what/how is it used? Things like that, while certainly not integral to the plot and story, would give the world a more full and well rounded feeling. Just a suggestion though.

I look forward to the next chapter, and I wish you luck in your scholarly endeavors! Keep writing!

Steve S.