Wow, this is actually quite good. Thanks for reviewing my stuff. God have had such a writers block this last year... been writing like Weird Al, taking songs and writing parodies. I should really upload them on here...

I enjoyed this one a lot though, each line Haiku, however when it is continuous I believe it is called Haikai unless I misunderstood my teacher. Japanese poetry is interesting, it's also probably much easier to write in japanese, where as here in english we have words that have 2 syllables, for them each "WORD" is a syllable or sound. I also wrote some WAKA style, (i think that's 5-7-5 5-7-5- 5-7-7-5 if I remember right)...

Keep it up. I see you stopped publishing last year though too... perhaps you have writers block like me.

Take care Brandon

Really? That's great! I find this lovely! And not to mention intriguing!