Reviews for One Afternoon
SpontaneousLaughter chapter 18 . 3/7/2015
This is such a sweet, well-written fic. The few errors were conventional, and everything stayed consistent, for the most part. I'm kind of new to Fictionpress, and this will be added to my favorites! Loved it.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 17 . 3/7/2015

Shipping. Confirmed.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 16 . 3/7/2015
God, all of those girls are animals!

It makes me laugh. But what happened to this being loaded with humor? Like, RED's humor?

Oh well.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 15 . 3/7/2015
I've always wondered what happened to her parents...

Anywho, oh my goodness, initiation? The talk that they had?

Pleased :-)

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 14 . 3/7/2015
Oh my goodness, they need to talk or something and like, not FAKE date anymore!


SpontaneousLaughter chapter 13 . 3/6/2015

Okay, bye.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 12 . 3/6/2015
Dude! Red's fart! Everything else! I just...I can't...

I was, like, dying of laughter.

And the whole "I resemble that" instead of "O resent that" was awesome!

Okay, I'm done now.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 11 . 3/6/2015
They. Are. Such. A. Cute. "Fake." Couple.

I ship it!

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 10 . 3/6/2015
They're making the cutest couple right now. Seriously, put this under romance. But keep the humor.

A few conventional errors, but not a bunch.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 9 . 3/6/2015
I'm seriously just reviewing for the sake of reviewing. Just so that your number can go up. Sorry I'm not giving actual feedback, but I REALLY want to keep on reading.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 8 . 3/6/2015
Ugh, gosh, "feminists" like Bo piss me off.

Okay, now I've got to read the next chapter.


SpontaneousLaughter chapter 7 . 3/6/2015
Okay, okay...I just want to get to reading now. Bye.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 6 . 3/6/2015
I...I can't even...

This was hysterical.

I mean, my mother seriously asked me if I was okay, because my laughter could be heard from that far away.

Ah. Nice.

SpontaneousLaughter chapter 5 . 3/6/2015
If they keep calling each other "fake-SO", their charade will be up soon.

Just a few questions:
a) Is Adam new there?
b) Why did he enroll at that school that year?
c) How is he NOT mad at Nat all of the time?
SpontaneousLaughter chapter 4 . 3/6/2015
I laughed so hard throughout this entire chapter.

Just one thing. It would be easier to realize who's who if you did something differing with their texts. Like, maybe italics and bold? Oh well. This story's completed anyway.

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