Reviews for One Afternoon
MissLoremasterSarah chapter 18 . 3/7
This is such a sweet, well-written fic. The few errors were conventional, and everything stayed consistent, for the most part. I'm kind of new to Fictionpress, and this will be added to my favorites! Loved it.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 17 . 3/7

Shipping. Confirmed.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 16 . 3/7
God, all of those girls are animals!

It makes me laugh. But what happened to this being loaded with humor? Like, RED's humor?

Oh well.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 15 . 3/7
I've always wondered what happened to her parents...

Anywho, oh my goodness, initiation? The talk that they had?

Pleased :-)

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 14 . 3/7
Oh my goodness, they need to talk or something and like, not FAKE date anymore!


MissLoremasterSarah chapter 13 . 3/6

Okay, bye.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 12 . 3/6
Dude! Red's fart! Everything else! I just...I can't...

I was, like, dying of laughter.

And the whole "I resemble that" instead of "O resent that" was awesome!

Okay, I'm done now.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 11 . 3/6
They. Are. Such. A. Cute. "Fake." Couple.

I ship it!

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 10 . 3/6
They're making the cutest couple right now. Seriously, put this under romance. But keep the humor.

A few conventional errors, but not a bunch.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 9 . 3/6
I'm seriously just reviewing for the sake of reviewing. Just so that your number can go up. Sorry I'm not giving actual feedback, but I REALLY want to keep on reading.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 8 . 3/6
Ugh, gosh, "feminists" like Bo piss me off.

Okay, now I've got to read the next chapter.


MissLoremasterSarah chapter 7 . 3/6
Okay, okay...I just want to get to reading now. Bye.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 6 . 3/6
I...I can't even...

This was hysterical.

I mean, my mother seriously asked me if I was okay, because my laughter could be heard from that far away.

Ah. Nice.

MissLoremasterSarah chapter 5 . 3/6
If they keep calling each other "fake-SO", their charade will be up soon.

Just a few questions:
a) Is Adam new there?
b) Why did he enroll at that school that year?
c) How is he NOT mad at Nat all of the time?
MissLoremasterSarah chapter 4 . 3/6
I laughed so hard throughout this entire chapter.

Just one thing. It would be easier to realize who's who if you did something differing with their texts. Like, maybe italics and bold? Oh well. This story's completed anyway.

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