Was SO happy to see this in my inbox, and a huge thanks for making it a long one :) I love the build-up; your pacing is really impeccable.
I totally understood her trying to provoke John in her passive ways (been there!), and his reactions were great! Your characters seem very realistic and human and I’m really really excited to see where this goes. Thanks for being my favorite author on here!

Yesss! A new chapter! Thank you! I really enjoyed this chapter. I couldn't help but laugh when John kept finding excuse to open Sloane's door and check up on her and Matty. Their argument and John's confession was really nicely done. I'm glad they finally let each other know what they're thinking. Please update soon!

your story was reviewed on ADoR!

How lovely! I'm at the edge of my seat, eager for more. If I was this girl I think I would just cry and cry. So tragic.

Hey! This is Melissa from ADoR letting you know that your amazing story has been reviewed for the site. Here's your review:

Melissa Thinks: I have waited a long while for this story to be long enough for me to review; I cannot say I’m disappointed with what I’ve found within “Cinder Creek”. It’s definitely reminiscent of a story I reviewed early on in my ADoR days by this same author, SophieInPink.

When her father dies, seventeen-year-old Sloane is left to care for her three younger siblings. This is nothing new considering she’s been doing it since she was twelve, their alcoholic father not willing to care for them properly. Of course, Sloane is still a minor and by law is not able to gain custody. On top of that, due to debt left behind by her deceased father, the Lennox’s childhood home is about to be repossessed.

Just as Sloane is about to lose all hope, John steps in. John is the stepbrother of Sloane’s long dead mother, Gracie. The only living relative of the children, John must either step up as their guardian or leave them to be split up by the foster system, despite the fact that he’s only twenty-three. The Lennox children weren’t expecting him to say yes, neither were they expecting him to invite them to live with him in his cramped two-bedroom home on the outskirts of town. This is where the story really begins, as Sloane has to learn how to work together with John to raise the kids.

SophieInPink has a way with words; her narration leaves little to be desired and her plot, though cliché, is mended by the reader’s love of her characters. Sloane is a mature and strong character. Both her willingness to do anything for her siblings and her hardened resolve give her substance. Even though the romance between Sloane and John is a slow build, I found each chapter enjoyable – every character interaction worth the time. Not all authors can say this, for I often see novels in which there is nothing natural about the way relationships progress.

They may not have realized their feelings before, but the tension now sounds very palpable. I'm surprised that Charlie, who seems quite worldly-wise, hasn't picked up on it yet... or has she?

This is so good.

This made my day! I just love this story and the characters. It makes me so happy when I read it. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Thanj you for continuing. I'm really enjoying thw story.

i'm so happy that you updated! and this is easily my favorite chapter! of course, sloane's stubbornness always lands her in some trouble, lol. but, the last part was especially my favorite, and i can't wait for some more sloanexjohn drama and romance! please update soon, and the next chapter seems like it will be great! your chapters never fail to make me beg for more, lol.

please do update. really really love your story, looking forward to the next one

Ahahah this story is way too cute! I love it! I love how you wrote Sloane and John's relationship. The pacing is so perfect! You have great talent. Keep up the awesome writing! I can't wait for the next update :))

Please do update when possible thank you! :)

I have this terrible habit of reviewing all of my alerted stories after I've updated my own story. Which means that sometimes it can be so so long before I review a story (so that's what is happening right now). Anyway, on to the review!

Okay, first of all I love love love the fact that you give so much responsibility to the reader. You barely ever "tell" the reader something, instead you describe these tiny miniscule details that go into Sloane's affection for John and vice versa. You encourage the reader to notice these things and read between the lines. And I love that so so much. My favorite examples of this in the chapter is when Sloane watches John stretch. I know it's a such an incredibly simple thing but I *definitely* remember doing that when I had a crush on a guy. It's little details like that which keep the story very realistic. So great job with that!

Also I felt *so* bad for Sloane when she felt guilty for not getting John a better Christmas present. I was laughing so so hard when I saw that she gave him a pair of measly socks. When John commented on that my mind immediately jumped to Dumbledore when he says he would like a pair of socks for his birthday or whatever :P
I was seriously hoping that she'd make up for that godawful gift by kissing him under the mistletoe or something equally cheesy, but, alas, I guess I'll have to wait until this blizzard hits! Haha I'm so excited to see Sloane panic and fumble about :P

Anyway great chapter over all and I sincerely look forward to the next one!

Hello! i love your story! Please update soon!