Reviews for Don't Run Anymore
E.Nelson chapter 5 . 7/18/2013
Really good chapter. Seems like you're jumping around a lot though. Maybe put in a couple of filler chapters? I know, filler chapters are boring, but explain about the fire, explain about how Alarina got where she was in this chapter maybe? :) keep up the good work
E.Nelson chapter 3 . 7/18/2013
I really like this so far. But maybe go into Alarina's thoughts further, outside of what she says to Jade? Her thoughts and emotions are really important since you're doing this first person. I really love the names that you have for them, they are wonderful and fitting, and unique too.
What's the emotion in Kale's voice? Is he speaking fervently, is he exasperated, or is he on the verge of desperation by now? That's something that Alarina should be noticing too :)
Also, when translating, you could just italicize it, and say that he was speaking in Irish tongue unless it was a short phrase, then you could put it in Irish, and then in italics after the whole "he spoke quickly" or whatever you could pop it in in English. I'm sure it'll get confusing looking for footnotes of translations lol.
Keep up the good work. :)
Wallflower.x chapter 4 . 7/17/2013
I am absolutely loving this! Your description is superb! And you have such a natural talent for writing.
Wallflower.x chapter 3 . 7/16/2013
Update soon. I really like your characters