Tararaat

for what there is this is great I wish for more.

Great story, give us more. Thanks

I like the story, but I hope the person writing it is very young because their command of the English language and the use of a spell checker are terrible.

this is a great begin to what could be a epic length story beside some editing issue that could be fix with a beta I find my self intreged and waiting for more.

Seems like this could be a much longer story.

Continue. It is interesting and this is one of the few I am following.
Was this the TinkerBell request?

If you are not going to post the story what are you going to do with it. Seems like a waste to tease an audience like this. Why should I spend my time starting a story that I will not be able to finish? I know I will be reluctant to start anything you write in the future. It is your life your decisions, but this one makes no sense. If you feared plagiarism why post at all.

Good Luck
Good Writing
Good Bye

Could use some editing, but good story line.