|Reviews for Zenith of the Stars|
| A Guy chapter 2 . 3/10
I dont really like the concept of this story. in my honest opinion, I think that if you were trying to revamp the unimportant Daydreamer story, you should have kept a tighter resemblance to the original. basically you just scrapped everything that made the original story so great and gave us a totally different story and characters and settings. while I agree AUD needed to be cleaned up this is nothing like AUD. This is not Leo Arclen either. Part of what made him such an appealing character was that he was a normal(Unimportant) teenager thrown into a world of chaos armed with nothing but the seal of primrose and a scuba suit and slowly grows into Zenith. If he starts as Zenith there couldnt possibly be as much and as interesting a character development. And what's this with the colonies? what made you do this? this could have all easily happened on Earth. You just ruined what i thought would be a great trilogy in time. Thanks for nothing! You have now become my least favorite author. Thank you and Good Night
| 360pages chapter 1 . 7/16/2014
I think you could use a little more dialog tags, something to vary and portray emotion. Does X character hold their hands on their hips, if they do when and why during the conversation. Also you are using the wrong marks for dialog, it should be " " rather than ' ' You usually use ' ' when you have someone recount what another character has said.
| ZombieKitten chapter 1 . 7/26/2013
Seems like this will make a good story :)
Your writing style is very good too. Cant wait for the next chapter.