Poor Castelle! I hope things look up for you soon, sweetie!

I'm noticing a number of instances where the last letter of a word is replaced by a period. It's a peculiar recurring typo and I thought you should be made aware of it. Aside from this, given that it is a first draft, this is looking very good so far.

Yes, I finished (read: SKIMMED THROUGH) "The Advocate Prince", and it did not disappoint. Are you planning to have it produced in an audio format? Do you have enough control for that? I'd love to hear an audio version of it one day. :D

Giggle. Horatio, you're too clever/ observant by half. Oh, Kayley...

Finally! Woooo... :)
Of course, there are still hurdles, but yay!

Hmmmm. Castelle, I hope so too.

Oh, Horatio!
Poor guy.
And I knew *someone* would've noticed...

Good chapter. Why did no-one notice Castelle had the gem, at the end there? You'd think someone would have...

Nice stuff... What a way to come back.

Good chapter. I was completely confused after the action of the last one, but a good sort of confused.
Poor Brother Zay...

Oh, phew.
But poor girl... She can never catch a break.

Thank you. Now, allow me to squeal a bit...
Yesssss! At last! A simple scene, but very good... Though my mind was slightly distracted at first by Kayley noticing the missing ones.
But oh goodness, yippee! And *of course* that was Cinos' plan!
(Yes, I'm a hopeless romantic, so am a bit gushy...)

Interesting. But why do I get the feeling he's walking into a trap?

Oh dear...

Oh, poor Kayley! Whatever will happen next?

Oh goodness!
What a mess!
Oh dear, Horatio...