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I'm not sure how I feel about the ending. Something felt not quite right. I can't help but feel the mood is off. Alexis's character went through so many transformations. It was like he wasn't the same person throughout. Multiple-personality disorder perhaps? He started off as a frivolous, overly attached ninny, and suddenly became an obsessive abusive douche. I couldn't be sure. Seraphim's character was a little difficult to find redeeming at the end. Killing a bunch of people just to make a point of principle, it's so convoluted I think I lost whatever love I had for his character. He lost more of his kindness and humanity as the story progressed and for a reason that was not really convincing. I couldn't really feel for him at the end. :( As for Kayto, I think I saw too little of his interaction and development with Seraphim to grow attached to him as a character. It's weird because even though Kayto was to be the star of the show, I ended up thinking Alexis stole the show. I think if you back track you'll see there is vastly more development between Alexis and Seraphim than between him and Kayto. I had thought more chemistry would develop between Alexis and Seraphim because of the amount of time spent on them. There was potential for chemistry between them which obviously never manifested, but there was a lot of strange groundwork laid out. I suppose much of that was to showcase Seraphim's ascension to the darkness with Alexis' influence. Seraphim's reaction to his death felt incredibly off. I mean Alexis was his sire. He defined what it meant to be a vampire to him. And while he was vile and did things to him that he didn't want, Alexis very clearly and very obviously loved him and took very good care of him. Even if Seraphim hates him, I don't think he could deny that Alexis loves him. And he just left him there without feeling any guilt whatsoever. I think good drama coulda been whipped up in that moment. I guess Seraphim's motivations were hard to grasp and fully understand. Even him giving in to the drunk blood parties were weird. He never resisted. He never mentioned resisting. And his reason for not resisting was strange or hard to grasp. If he was so pious really, he should be outrightly resisting to his fullest extent he never did and made no mention of it. He said one thing and did another. I guess I just couldn't understand why he was doing what he was doing even though the story was being told from his perspective.

But all in all, I enjoyed the story immensely. I think you write with such beautiful and flowing prose. Seraphim has some kind of sass like I've never seen and I thought it was hilarious at times. I wasn't entirely sure if that was the mood you were aiming for though. Definitely keep writing though. Don't stop. This is a well written story and I hope you continue to write more moving forward. Your style is so distinct and fluid the story just flows so seamlessly. I would love to see more of your future works. I am excited for him. Aaaaaand then I see you haven't updated in years. So shoot me in the foot now, at least you finished one story and I can be satisfied with this at least. TT_TT I don't even want to think to start the second book seeing that it's been left unfinished. What if you passed away and I'll never know the conclusion? You'll just take the ending with you to the grave. How horrible... I get anxiety thinking about it.

I take it back. I don't like Alexis. He's gross.

I change my mind on the two main characters. Seraphim is full of sass for someone who is such a stick in the mud, and Alexis is a funny frivolous and overly attached heathen. I love the pair together. Alexis clearly adores Seraphim, but I can see from Serpham's perspective that Alexis is annoying and stupid as nothing else he can stand. The relationship between the two is hilarious.

Oooo...I love your writing. The language so so beautiful and it feels so iono...victorian. The flow is so nice and it feels like a book I picked up from a bookshelf. I love it. I feel like I've been transported back in time. The voice of your characters and the way that you make them feel so real. Alexis is such a douche and Seraphim is such a vindicated tortured soul. Delicious drama. Please don't ever start writing. You've borne new worlds and lives in these lines and I need more to lose myself in after a long hard day at work. :)

I'll just use some of the words of the previous reviewer.. "you're on to something".. but sometimes I am mystified: ..Adrian's Blessed Child.. pops out.. of the canals? .. personally, I would also rather a more original vamp queen and maybe even some more original Alexis reactions, also more care regarding the jargon in some instances.. but thank you for your story, I rather enjoyed it..

I read them backwards, book 2 first and now book 1. Really really enjoy your writing. This is what I took away from book 1: Perceptions, how you see yourself, how others see you, and perhaps most importantly from a self-esteem standpoint, how you THINK others perceive you. I read a few of the other reviews and I have to agree with at least one of them-I feel sorry for Alexis. I think he really did love Seraphin. I haven't read your short story yet (wanted to write this first) in case I'm wrong (or right.) Right now (having read the first two books in the wrong order) I have so many questions but I won't voice them in case some other readers decide to read these two books in the right order. I did want to say, though, that I really admire how you tell your story without going in depth into the back-story/world-view. A lot of it comes through loud and clear just through your character's interactions. It's a weakness of mine-I think I explaineth too much :) What your way does is make the reader hunger for more-and keep reading! I think you're on to something. I look forward to the entire series-so much so that I think I'm going to have to actually hit the "follow" button! (Usually I just look for stories I like on my own, but that's what made me find yours, read one chapter, and then lose it for months on end! The upside to that is I got to read most of it in one shot.) Thanks for a great story-will stay tuned for more.

Oh, gosh, I don't even know what to feel right now. Poor Kayto. Poor Seraphin, too, losing Kayto like that! I don't want to be upset with you since you'll eventually add more to this, but uuuggghhh, nooo! I was hoping for some kind of happy ending! Don't get me wrong, still an amazing story, but...ugh. I don't even know how to write what I want to say; I'm just a big ball of emotion right now.

Is it wrong to feel so awful for Alexis? The betrayal was most likely what caused Alexis' eyes to widen and at that moment I almost did want Seraphin to stop the hunter. Alexis must have loved Seraphin for him to come and attempt to rescue him, and for that reason I don't want him to die.

No! No, no, no, no! This cannot be happening right now! Oh my god. I was sitting here, chewing on my nails, anxious about what was going to happen, so happy that they were escaping and that Alexis died, but no! Kayto cannot be dead!

Wait, hold up. There's only 2 chapters left? Oh no! They've not even escaped the prison yet! The whole chapter was a nail biter, though, and it's so cute that Seraphin was so worried about Kayto. Gosh, this is so good.

Thank you for posting this work. I only found it today due to the change in rating. I read it all in one go and enjoyed it immensely. The struggle of choice that Seraphin is going through can be applicable to many people in real life, and I appreciate that you are focusing on it. I do believe that Seraphin deserves a second chance to live and love.

Ugh, that was so perfect! I'm so happy that Seraphin is finally accepting that he isn't evil, and that was really cute between them. I loved it! Also, I like the new story summary :) great chapter. It was far more hopeful than previous ones.

Wow, that was such a crazy chapter! I love how blunt Kayto was with Seraphin, though, because I think he needed to hear it from someone that he does love (which, by the way, was cute). I am glad that Seraphin kind of went out with a bang and wasn't found out for being a vampire over something mundane.

Wow, I love how he just completely snapped.. I still think Kayto will just go with it, though, and still accept Seraphin. I dunno. It seems like something he would do. Still a good chapter, and I'm glad to see Seraphin is finally really sticking up for himself.