Well, things are not heading off course as much as oh, Cabin in the Woods but, things are quickly turning from nice time to tense time. Getting to know the cast just enough to care if something pops out of the trees to eat them so should be fun.

Hey there Toast, I been checking stories and this one seems cool so here we are.

May be a small start but big things come from the smallest of places and while things seem chill now wonder if they will pull a Jumanji or something.

This is a short chapter where we see something strange going on. Without the explanation, it is clear that the boy consumed one of the vial and spider web began to grow on his skin. He might have something inside of him or not.

This is a nice way to introduce the characters and who they are through their dialogue and how they play in D&D.
The end of the game, we saw a glimpses of their life and who they are as real people instead of their character's avatar.

It starts nicely grounded with them before the more fantastical element will show up in your story. based on the description of the story.

Gosh darn it, its been ages since I logged back here and I have forgotten the story and my place in it. Bum. Sorry augie

Yes! Someone else who plays tabletop games! Anyway, I thought your new chapter was perfect. By the way, have you ever heard of Warhammer 40,000? (P.S. Great story)

I want a teacher like that!

As always, Incredible!

W.O.W!

Ahem...(blush)

As I said before, INCREDIBLE!

Mother F****ng Jesus! Incredible!

You could SOOO publish this, with some tweaks.

You really did NOT need to add the 'Captain Serious' as the story is freakin' incredible!

Wow! Engaging!