Okay, really liking this story so far. Despite a relative lack of description, it's fast, smart, and funny. You detail your supernatural creatures, cast, and premise fairly well in a short period of time. Really liking this, and hoping it ends well.

Glad to see more of this, and the insight into Duck's past is a nice touch.
I don't have much else to add here and I don't like fussing about this kind of thing, but I noticed an "apaused" there, but other than that nothing caught my eye.
Still hoping for shit to get real at the hotel :L
And I must know, are there really places that do sushi and burgers? And does anyone really do paper work sober?

I'm really enjoying the development of Dawn, I love her sassy-as attitude. Careful, though, this is a delicate line to walk, otherwise she falls into "bitch" territory. Doing well so far, but watch out.

More stories need to include the word "fuggly".

Very nice! Leaps straight into the action, exciting, engaging, fast-paced. Lots of hooks to draw us into an interesting world. Looking forward to more. The mental picture of "our hero" screaming and crying at the top of his lungs like a little girl is hilarious.

I will say that it took a few seconds to mentally reconfigure and not picture a quack-quack duck running screaming down the streets.