|Reviews for Reality of another|
| lirianstar chapter 1 . 10/15/2017
This gave me a very darker-than-black feeling - the powers, the organisation and team too! The mcs seems to be in sync - and since its a side story I'll check out the main!
| My21Heartbeats chapter 1 . 10/27/2014
I like this chapter. I get a sort of mysterious air from this chapter but they may be due to me not reading the first of this series. Either way, I enjoy the storyline and the characters. I'll have to read this from the beginning though to fully understand it, I'm assuming. When I read the description I immediately thought of how it is widely thought that each person creates their own reality within our one world but it seems like you've created a world where these different realities combine and that's awesome.
| Darth Zannacross chapter 1 . 12/29/2013
Well, I am a bit confused at the moment, I may be reading out of order though. Some of the concepts look interesting though, and from what it looks like Lana looks like fun. Well, keep it up and good luck with your stories.
| Katsurou Shimizu chapter 1 . 12/29/2013
I guess I'll take you up on that offer, cud ;)
Now, let's see what we have got here... story goes media res, straight into a tension-filled robbery and hostage scene, involving a standoff between hapless robbers and the Realitists. Me likey.
Concept of altering reality is something that I've actually pondered on doing before, and your take is certainly interesting enough. Reina's shield is rather reminiscent of Tsukiko's; wonder who will actually triumph in a bullet-repelling contest.
I am little iffy with the changing of perspectives throughout this chapter (head-hopping), since there isn't any scene break denoted in the text and I sorta got lost at times. General rule of thumb is to use one perspective in each scene for third person limited. In addition, using brackets to indicate thoughts, as in the case of Yuri, is also a rather curious decision. Unless there's a special reason for that, resorting to the default italics should be a safer and less distracting choice.
Nice start, though I have to admit that there isn't any character that springs to my attention at the moment. I'll maintain that you are better at 1st POV narration; take of that as you will.
All the best, and happy writing! *w*b
| xxxyx chapter 1 . 11/15/2013
Aw... no reviews? Poor story... :(
I like this better than (most chapters) of reality of one. It's... better paced, and more interesting. Tense!
Yes, go on and rewrite Reality of One if you've improved by this much! :)
Anyway, you intend it to be one side story, or a compilation of side stories?
The thing that I feel lacking is... I wished we can get to know the characters better. Will they appear again?