Reviews for Just a Tool
Veronica Fay chapter 3 . 10/24/2013
For some reason, I had thought Xi died, I'm glad that's not the case! I really like how you give information about Tools and this world, but still leave out much to led to a good 'confusion' leading me to need to read more!
Veronica Fay chapter 1 . 10/18/2013
Hi!

This was an interesting start! Is each line break, a different time period? like a flashback then present? I like how you always have creative names and different things happening! like MuTT and Hostile! I need to find out what these are. Good job!
Arethusa Cyberia chapter 6 . 10/9/2013
This is very interesting. I hope there’s a rebellion in the future. :) You need to go over this more closely and not rely solely on Spell Check, but I’m not seeing any blatant grammatical or structure errors.

You have just enough input from the characters so that this is not too removed from viewpoint and emotion, and the flashback and interior thought format is working. Good job! :)
Kaylin881 chapter 5 . 9/22/2013
Ooooh dear...I hope Piqa's alright. :(
Nostalgic Child1 chapter 2 . 9/11/2013
This looks really cool :)
Kaylin881 chapter 1 . 9/8/2013
What happened to Xi's chapter? _
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