|Reviews for The Masks of Rayne|
| Carmel March chapter 20 . 2/10
Sorry for the delay in reviewing! I just caught up with this and I'm loving it more than ever. Hope to see an update soon :)
| Wynter B. Byrne chapter 20 . 2/9
I have really nothing more to say than poor Haley. More of a filler than anything, this chapter was still good.
| GirlUnderTheLemonTree chapter 1 . 2/4
Two sentences in and I was already intrigued and empathetic about the character of Rayne. I like her relationship with her sister and admired her resolve to discover what the new was that the messenger was bringing, despite several obstacles. Keep up the good work.
| Wynter B. Byrne chapter 19 . 2/2
Hey, filler chapters are nice every once in a while. It keeps the plot from moving too fast. But the scene where they where dolling up Rayne reminded me too much of the Hunger Games when thy did that to Katniss.
And I don't think I've ever watched a fluff anime. I love fluff, but a whole anime based off it? I watch the good stuff with the people who turn into weapons and 19th century awesome english butlers that just so happen to be demons :D Yeah, I just pretty much watch what my friend recommends and she finds some pretty weird stuff...
| Wynter B. Byrne chapter 18 . 1/26
I love anime! KAWAII!
Anyway, enjoy your vacation. I love Hawai'i! Especially Kaua'i. My family has come to the agreement that that island is the best, especially with the Grand Canyon of the Pacific there. Which island are you going to.
Okay, you have to admit that the fortune teller is more than a little weird. More like... freaky. And so is Prince Lance. I just can't figure that guy out.
| amsies chapter 15 . 1/21
OMG they kissed! daaaaamn
I have to say that was a cute scene
It's so sad how Rayne is forced to deal with poophead princes. I like that Dell's still spunky. I hope they don't become like their mother :(
ps please forgive my reviews if they don't make sense. I'm really tired right now lol
| amsies chapter 2 . 1/21
Ooh! He's her escort! this is perfect lmao
I spotted some spelling errors:
close[d] my eyes
PS in the first review I confused Haley's last name for the pervy guy... lmao genius me T.T
| amsies chapter 1 . 1/21
I like the premise of this story. I'm a sucker for romance stories where the couple hates each other at first. Makes things entertaining :D
I like how you started the story with Rayne comparing her name to rain and tears and sadness. It's an interesting way to start (both in terms of character and prose). I feel bad for her- how her family uses her looks and ignores her as a person. I often forget that princesses are public figures with responsibilities to look pretty and perfect, but without any real power. It's so annoying how no one takes her seriously :
I do like how she's snarky, but be careful not to make her cliche- there are several rebellious princess characters out there.
Her conflict with the commoner is interesting- she can hold her own in a fight. I'm wondering though what kind of commoner guy would mess with a princess though. (He might be beheaded! lol) Is he the Haley guy?
I'm glad Rowanston let her in, but annoyed that he only did it because he thinks she's attractive... :
| Carmel March chapter 18 . 1/20
Ah, so good! I can't tell you how much I'm enjoying this. I can't wait for an update! :)
| mandie pink chapter 18 . 1/19
this is perfect the only thing lacking is the end
| Writy chapter 1 . 1/14
So, that's the first of seventeen chapters... I am pretty sure that review won't motivate you as much as one that would be pointed at your most recent writings. Anyway, sorry, but here I am! I am thinking of this opening (given the name of the chapter) as the introduction of a future relationship (friendship)?
Though I thought the cast was a little young - and yet not that much in a medieval setting - Rayne seems like an interesting main character. I won't say that the "rebel princess" is a shocker, it is definitely a common place, but you seem to have more than just a "beautiful face with a temper" to fuel your storyline. There is a boy, a war and according to your synopsis a duality to be displayed. I hope the plot will get more "screen time" than the potential love story.
I think there is much to learn about the rider and the war with Catkell... I have to say that I am not one to root for the royal family in general, so I might be a bit biased, but I'd say that they are in need of a little rumble. (I was a bit surprised at Rowanston's take on the situation, though... In my opinion being regal is less about money and more about blood.)
Anyway, sorry this wasn't directed at your latest chapters... I like your writing, keep it up!
| Wynter B. Byrne chapter 17 . 1/12
That sucks that you were sick. That has seemed to happen with a lot of writers on fanfiction too. Hope yore feeling better.
Anyway, I love Rayne and Haley's relationship. They probably hate it when they go to castles because it's not socially acceptable to be together. Well, it's still not acceptable to be together when they travel, but they can get away with it... You get my drift? I think that Lance is kind of weird so far (if I'm remembering correctly because I read waaaaaaay to many stories). Well anyway, I'm interested to see how this new kingdom works. See you next update!
Also (this has nothing to pertain to the story what-so-ever), do you watch anime? Jus' curious.
| Carmel March chapter 17 . 1/8
Loved this update! I am so excited to see what happens next! :)
| Carmel March chapter 16 . 12/22/2013
Wonderful chapter, loving how this story is developing and the world you've created. I especially loved the line "She tasted like peppermint" for some reason, simple and beautiful.
No problem, it's a joy to read this story :) Please update soon!
| Carmel March chapter 15 . 12/16/2013
I am enjoying this story so much. Your writing is lovely - descriptive and evocative, and the characters are great! I honestly can't wait for more!