Reviews for The End
WriterXOX chapter 1 . 10/5/2013
That's BEAUTIFUL!
It has so many repetitions and imagery that makes the text stronger.
Caroline chapter 1 . 9/25/2013
The movement in this piece is exquisite, as is the repetition at the beginning of lines and the occasional repetitive concept. The last line rhyming messed up my train of thought a bit; the word simultaneous doesn't flow exactly right. Synonym, maybe? Also, the phrase "year twelve" brings the poem from a sort of lofty, abstract perspective to high school. Not a pretty transition. I think the last two lines are the only omission or change I would make, though. Beautifully done, overall.