Reviews for All of Him
BradytheJust chapter 21 . 7/24/2016
Yay! :D
So now they are friends and lovers and will live happily every after and make lots of little babies together! The last sentence of the story really feels like the moral or overall theme of it "Two people can neither own one another yet still belong to one another" Awww... this theme will also be in "Before we were together." :) and it's good to see it here!

This was a wonderful story and a great discussion into "ownership and love" and what those mean as well as the line between right and wrong and our own actions.

Another amazing story my friend!
BradytheJust chapter 20 . 7/24/2016
Oh, how I understand Allegra's guilt!
I've had to deal with doing the wrong thing for the right reasons before and the guilt of "You should hate me."
You've handled the emotions perfectly and made it feel so real my heart hurts for her.. and I'm crying. :'(

Don't hate her Zech!
BradytheJust chapter 19 . 7/24/2016
Man, I just want AlleZech to be together! :D *pouts* They need to obey my neon sign!

Once again you have done a wonderful job of putting together the suspense of literally putting a person back together and pumping their life and identity back into them. Having Allegra think about her fantasies of what will happen if Zech wakes up as either a human or a Zomb was very effective in adding to the tension, I'm sweating bullets here!

I must read more!
BradytheJust chapter 18 . 7/24/2016
AHHHH! :D :D :D *lights up sign and dances around it happily!*

Yay for romance! :D
This is the perfect climax to the 'guilt' plotline! I loved the lines after the page break, too much for words... just having her break down and cry and try to deal with Zech's programming was a really powerful scene to see in my head, and you wrote it beautifully.

Now I'm going to leave these lovebirds alone and move to the next chapter!
BradytheJust chapter 17 . 7/23/2016
Nanos! _
Man, those bots are useful! ;) I really liked how you wrote Allegra's feelings so well, and they transferred over to me. I was panicking while she was, happy while she was, and really ticked at allegra's slow reboot time :/

Okay, so this is where the gets the idea to Zomb him... now I really feel her guilt!
Tomorrow I shall finish this story!
BradytheJust chapter 16 . 7/23/2016
Ahhhh! :O

So two pieces of advice I learned:
"Never ignore an electronic device while it is doing the electronic version of screaming its lungs out" and "Zech is powerless when it comes to Allegra."
Whoa, he is the perfect gentleman! He does any task without complaint, worries about her like a loyal puppy, and shielded her from an explosion.

So this is how he became a Zomb... and it's all Allegra's fault. Now I understand her guilt...
I must read more! :)
BradytheJust chapter 15 . 7/23/2016
Awww! *lights up AlleZech sign again*

This was a wonderful chapter, especially since Allegra was seeing it from the orb. It's a unique situation, watching yourself and your memories like a movie, and you did a good job. I also loved the little touches and things Zech did to her once he realized she was flirting with him.

And don't worry Allegra, flirting is an art form and takes forever to get right... I wish I had a program to teach me how to flirt...

Great chapter! :D
BradytheJust chapter 14 . 7/22/2016
*lights up the sign and dances around it*

Sorry Zech but girls influence guys, the sooner you realize you are powerless before those blue-green eyes and that smile, the better it'll be for you! ;)

The last section with Allegra begging Zech to teach her to drive the MUTT was adorable and made me dance a little!
I also like the idea of the respiration symbiote that works in your lungs by dissolving the poison into things to excrete. Great concept! :)
BradytheJust chapter 13 . 7/22/2016
Awww! *lights up AlleZech sign*

Nice first meeting here between the two characters! :) You did a wonderful job describing them, almost as if I myself am meeting them for the first time. I feel like this could be the first chapter in this story, it's so well written!

I also loved Allegra's wisdom "Time heals everything, even the things we think we've destroyed." So could time heal the relationship between them?
I must keep reading! :D
BradytheJust chapter 12 . 7/21/2016
The question from last review still stands... can I hurt Papa? Please?

Oh my gosh I'm crying again! I loved the feeling that Allegra felt about how "He should hate me for what I've done" and how she wanted to go to the PH "A place for dirty liars like her" So well written! Still I know the emotions Allegra is feeling... and they suck :P

So Zech has been through the process before... interesting.

Amazing chapter as always!
BradytheJust chapter 11 . 7/21/2016
I have never wanted to hurt someone as bad as I have wanted to hurt Zech's father right now... can I hurt him, please?

I love how allegra seems to butt in at every point when Allegra is attempting to have a moment to herself. :) My computer does the same thing to me!
I also loved the discussion of love in this chapter, and what it might mean, because everyone's definition is different, and how Zech gave her a pedicure because he can't stop doing nice things... so sweet! ;) I'm very much the same way!

Amazing chapter as always
BradytheJust chapter 10 . 7/20/2016
There are two reasons that I love this chapter!:
1. Seeing Allegra flush at touching Zech and Zech's bare skin, and yet dismissing it as a fever (I think she's just lovesick!) It was wonderful!
2. The question about owning Zombs. It's comparable to Slavery really, even though a "Zomb is a person who has been turned into a thing." Letting Allegra have a discussion with herself about the morality of owning a Zomb and if she should be ashamed about it really added another depth to her character and it was very interesting to read.

However, I do disagree with her statement that "people who aren't in their best mental health have internal monologues" I'm not crazy (I think) and I have monologues all the time! :)
BradytheJust chapter 9 . 7/20/2016
Okay, this chapter really gave a good look into Allegra and Zech's past before he became Zombed.
I really liked the hand holding to transfer information and the fact that Allegra held his hand after the transfer was done.
And having Allegra have trouble with figuring out what a handshake was, was very funny :)

Zech's human personality is very different from his lack of a personality as a zomb, and I can see why Allegra is so guilty about losing that personality.

Great chapter as always!
BradytheJust chapter 8 . 7/19/2016
Mother of God! :O
I'm actually crying right now! I feel so bad for Zech and Allegra just let him do it... her nanobots manipulated his vocal cords! Argh!
I love the concept of the Promise between the two, it really adds a special layer to the 'ownership' of a Zomb.

You described the Zomb forming process so well I'm crying and in a cold sweat! I really feel Allegra's pain at seeing her friend 'die' and become a blank mindless slate.

Great chapter as always! By the way... do you have a tissue?
BradytheJust chapter 7 . 7/19/2016
Man each chapter just gets better and better! :D
Having Allegra be so conflicted about how to steal Zech's memories and then find out it results in a petty misdemeanour is so ironic it's almost funny. I also liked the descriptions of the steps she took to take the data and then block off her trail, it really brought a 'shouldn't be doing this' vibe to the paragraph.

I also loved how sincere Zech is as a Zomb, you can insult him and he'll still try to care for you. Although I wanted Allegra to say yes to his "I can hold your hand until you fall asleep..." Awww, now I want that!

And we finally get to see the connection between Zech and Allegra... I must read one more chapter! (I've limited myself to two chapters a day and now I'm breaking that rule!)
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