I'm so sad it's over! What a beautiful story! I love how you developed the characters, the plot line, their loving relationship. It was so realistic and beautifully heartbreaking. I so much enjoyed it and I hope you keep writing similar works in the future. Thank you for a great read!

This is an awesome start! I like how you added the backstory, because it helps with clarification. :)

- IceWriter25

Hah hah. The fountain incident. But it makes me wonder if the other black people might have minded like white people minded, because didn't they have pent up hatred toward whites because of how unfairly they'd been treated?

Also, you bring up an interesting subject, what unbiblical, so-called truths, were whites being indoctrinated with in their houses of worship, that they believed the negro race was inferior to them? Things like that irk me. If people would read the Word for themselves and weigh it against what they hear in the pulpit, they would question false teaching more.

I like the conflict and how you draw the reader into the era. I think the first scene could use more narration, a touch of setting and description. It has the feel of talking, disembodied heads in a room. I'd like to see the characters more rather than just hear their voices.

Beautiful start to an interesting story, though each scene seems short. You may also want to watch the overuse of adverbs (words ending in "ly").

This is a great opening chapter. I'm always amazed at how fast you can introduce your characters, how much detail you give about their past, but it's never slow to read. Andre and Lindy are both great to read about and they seem like real people the moment they get together. I also like the cover photo!

Great start to the story - definitely want to continue reading this. Well written and interesting and shows how love can transcend bigotry. Keep writing, Morris.