Reviews for Difficult Choice
Meng En chapter 1 . 11/22/2013
Interesting. The pacing is consistent, although the last two paragraphs in the chapter shifted themselves altogether into a different tone and pacing from the former five sections. The protagonist's emotions and thoughts are clearly defined without any fluctuations from your selected style and diction.
Perhaps a few revisions for a more lucrative sentence structure flow would help improve the slightly jarring feeling seen in the thought processes before the jump? I would understand it if the faulty parallelism is intentionally placed there to create a more consistent atmosphere of tense apprehension.
Nice job for your first upload, albeit the lack of revisions.