Reviews for On The Outside
LorrahBear chapter 1 . 5/16
I like how you've given hints of your characters true personality. I'm interested to see where it goes from here.

I did notice a few times where the tenses swapped, but with some additional proofreading, that would be an easy fix. One such example is in the first paragraph: "...doing anything I [could] to..."

Well done.
Guest chapter 1 . 4/1
Great chapter I was totally hooked and the ending left me asking for more.
Wonderful story chapter 1 . 3/8
HEy, I was wondering if you knew how I could post. Used to be a member of the old fiction press.
milkywayxo chapter 1 . 11/15/2015
Love this start.! Very final fantasy-esque beginning... not sure if my video game reference makes much sense. :p intrigued to see where you will take this story. Onto the next...
Aquade chapter 25 . 7/9/2014
Thanks for the chapter!

Ooh! It's the government's fault for allowing so many people to die! Well, the government's and the terrorists' fault, at least.
Aquade chapter 24 . 7/7/2014
So the folder is like a diary!? And it holds secrets as well. What will they find out in there?
Zarica Vicen chapter 23 . 6/15/2014
This is good. TTFN (Ta ta for now) I tip my top hat
Aquade chapter 23 . 6/13/2014
Ooh! A mission! Info-gathering, huh?
Aquade chapter 22 . 6/11/2014
Ooh! So she's getting closer with Tank! I wonder what the other will think about this.
Pictureme chapter 7 . 6/11/2014
meow
Zarica Vicen chapter 20 . 6/11/2014
btw dzgirl11 was me I wasd to lazy to log in
Zarica Vicen chapter 22 . 6/11/2014
I can't wait for the next chapter.
*salutes
Zarica Vicen chapter 21 . 5/2/2014
leah with tank serena with jake
dzgirl11 chapter 20 . 4/16/2014
Good job. I wish she kissed Tank instead though. PS im to lazy to log in
Zarica Vicen chapter 19 . 2/26/2014
I can't wait for the next chapter
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