|Reviews for Melamin (私の愛)|
| Sy chapter 17 . 10/14/2020
A STORY OF ASTALD? Oh, this is a plasant surprise!
HE WAS YOUNG... OH NO, BABY, YOU FELL IN LOVE... This won't end well.
IT DIDN'T END WELL, the father found out, oh no.
And of course Grievor saw the poor lad... :(
Grievor took advantage of this guy's desperation to sign his soul up to Huine omg this opportunistic bastard. Astald just wanted to help his people...
"I ask for thine power in exchange my soul is yours to command." BRO LISTEN TO YOURSELF, THE CURSE IS RIGHT THERE SKDJSKKS
Ok from this prequel, we know Astald is initially innocent until he was duped into selling his soul to a demon. :( Poor guy. Tbh I hoped one of the kids would see the Drows' suffering as an alarming thing that the elves need to work on. Cant' really see how they're gonna get along with humans when they're like this with the Drows, but I guess it'll work out with Kensui and Mela being the symbol of peace h
All in all, this was a lovely prequel and I enjoyed it
THIS ENTIRE STORY IS ENJOYABLE and epic, thank you for sharing this with the world!
| Sy chapter 16 . 10/14/2020
I can finally read the final battle! I'm so excited to continue! Okay! Let's go!
Omg Astald you absolute dunce, I can't believe you brought upon the goddam God of Chaos smh. Tbh I already forgot what was his motive, was it to destroy the entirety of the elven race? Because they've wronged the Drows? Yikes buddy, you need therapy if your soul weren't already lost. Like I get the vengeful plot, but still.
Bruh, Huine is so OP... Like Dragonball-tier OP.
Actually this entire right is, it's epic! Like at first Kalina tries to sacrifice herself, and then Kensui tried to do things his way but that backfired, and THEN Mela tried to face that thing on her own, which also seems hopeless. There's like this chain of hopelessness, which then finally turns into hope via tbe power of love Sailormoon-style, and I vibe with that.
"merge Eldamar with the human world once again" It happened before! I'm sure I forgot this was mentioned since I haven't read for a few months, but that makes sense! Because the Kusinagi family crest being similar to the old elven symbol, if I remember correctly. What I don't remember is whether it was mentioned why the 2 worlds were divided. Hmm, maybe I'll learn as I read further.
I READ FURTHER, IT WAS BECAUSE OF THE WAR, OF COURSE IT IS.
And then Kensui wISHED FOR THE WORLDS to live as one! ;v;
Kalina tries to sacrifice herself as per the Elven Star's prophecy, oh shet. It's also interesting to note that she might probably be Mela's stepsister. Her backstory with her mother was an interesting surprise! Actually, when she mentioned her wish and her body changed, it was really super surprising! To think that she chose to stay as a child to welcome her dead mother... That was really sad, and I'm glad she managed to put the thing behind her now. What a backstory...! I can see why you like her character so much.
I have no words when Mela and Kensui finally managed to wound Huine, it was truly *chefkiss* The cliche unity and bond trope that works for every shonen works in this as well and I admire it. It's really hopeful and lovely ;v; Especially with their combined assault of love, rip Huine we barely knew ye
I also really like that the Elven Star took in Harumi's form as it accept their wishes, it just brings the whole thing back into a perfect circle.
Fabrics of reality rewritten and morphed the two worlds, lets goooo!
| Sy chapter 15 . 8/26/2020
I'm reading this as I wait for my videos to transfer and ohmygodddd, this chapter!
THE DUEL OF MATRIMONY COMEBACK!
Now I see why you made Kalina introduced it some chapters ago, it's for this! So you wouldn't use this crucial time to explain what it is if Kalina hadn't brought it up! Brilliant story-pacing and planning.
me Astald rambling about his goal: villain's got a point
HE'S A DROW I KNEW IT, EVER SINCE THE GOBLIN UNDERLING-
Ok yknow, Astald's revenge is understandable and I commend you as the writer for it. Especially about the marriage by sexual intercourse detail, dude's got a solid point lmao
Oh my god, their fight.
I particularly like when their sword breaks and they went immediately for fists in flight or fight mode. A classic favorite.
YO, WHEN HE REFUSES TO GO THROUGH THE ELVEN LAWS, because that's the very thing that fcked him and his species over for a millenium... That was raw. You're an asshole but I respect you, Astald.
H-! IM FINALLY MEETING THE BBEG, H IS HUINE! HELLO HUINE, are you the god the Drows bow to, because if you are, then awesome, youre officially the final final boss!
I will await the time I can read the next chapter with great anticipation!
| Sy chapter 14 . 8/23/2020
OHMYGOD! I'm just letting you know that I took a little bit of my time every day for DAYS just trying to finish this chapter, and omg... okok, I have 7 points! I hope I remember them all lmao
First of all, Kensui is such a determinator omg... His feelings for Mela is so extreme, he's been running for god knows how long... My god. You better be thankful you have elven blood in you Kensui, if you're 100% human, you'd die from hydration alone skdkskd slow down, boye.
I don't remember if it's been explained before, but what is a Drow? I recall Mela reacting strongly to that one Drow that came to Astald when she's being imprisoned (rip to him btw lol)... What I imagined in my head is some kind of dark elf lmao, but I could be wrong. I'll await your answer in discord!
That demon Grandewald said something like "special delivery to H-" H who... H WHO. I don't remember Astald's full name hahaha. Or it's someone else entirely?
Oh my goodness. The fights! You know your shonen, and for that I tip my hat to you. I love the way you make the heroes face their adversaries and presents the possibility of them seriously losing their respective fights, like when I read Ushio vs Shu'Lan, I was like inwardly "oh this is impossible, the meganekko is just a human who just recently learned spells, fighting against a seasoned huntress, rip" but she managed to turn the tables anyway, thanks to the Elven Star, and im here like yisssss.
I ALSO LIKE how you make each of them having their separate personalities, like how the guy fighting Satomu seems very honorable and fair. Props to that.
Kalina using the standard tactic against a literal wall of an ogre was also fun to read. I'm just glad he didn't manage to CRUSH HER IN HIS HAND at that one moment omg, that's such a sucky way to die, oof.
KENSUI'S FIGHT THO... BROOOO...
This is literal dragonball shet and I'm all here for it. His love for Mela so strong, he defies everything. Hot damn.
Astald killing that old dude after he "outlived" his usefulness made me feel thankful he didn't kill Sakura when she outlived her usefulness hhh
Or, is he expecting he can get more out of her, like using her as bait for something, hmm... Nah, he already wiped her memory iirc, I'll just assume she's lucky because he's in a better mood hhhh
"One whose love is true will sacrifice all to reunite the two lovers. One who feels no obligation but loves completely because of their heart."
Bro, what. What does that mean? WHAT DOES THAT MEAN? By Kalina's reaction, that must be important, right?!
Oh shet. Kensui. Buddy. Idk how to tell you this but uh. You might have problems later on. Oof.
| Sy chapter 13 . 8/17/2020
Oh my god, even from the title, I'm already doing that one eyes emoji, oh no
I like the way you make Astald's cage functions lmao. I just am generally impressed by the little things you've thought of that's out of the ordinary; the training by falling, the cage, the elven magic limitations... It's just so good.
f.. foe yay... Ushio been looking up TV Tropes I see, hahahaha. That made me snicker.
On that note, the friends are here! Thanks, Kalina!
By how you've made the princesses train, I genuinely am fearful of what the kids will have to undergo during their training montage.
Okay but that bit about the eldest sister... That was from the very opening of the chapter, right? I'm only vaguely remembering it now, but that's a really good callback, wow. I'm trying hard to remember now even lmao
YOOOOOO That last bit with Kensui sporting the Black Rock Shooter look while doing what he does, plus that ending sentense is Extremely Cool. Hot damn.
This was such a badass chapter, my god.
Kensui really didn't want to lose another person in his life ever again, understandably. I'm cheering for him!
| Sy chapter 12 . 8/15/2020
SEXUAL CONTACT SEALS THE BOND! IM!
Okay okay calm down, one at a time lmao my head is spinning everywhere at this, this is great!
First of all I am very glad to know the confirmation of my guess that Kensui indeed has elven lineage, and not just that, his ancestor was even a previous ruler. Dayum.
The part where the ring refuses to accept Astald is amazing, and the way it flew directly to Kensui is just *chefkiss* Excellente.
I genuinely thought the parents would be on Kensui's side since they partly helped with the elevator situation, but I guess that's mostly on Kalina. God bless Kalina, she's amazing.
Also. Oh boy. KIDNAPPING. I knew I called this but I thought Kensui was the one who'd be the dude in distress hahaha. Now I suppose he's gonna have to rally his friends and get back his wife.
Astald's dark glowy shit is the most intriguing thing to me though. What does he meant by 50 years of tolerating elven culture and leniency. Lowkey wondering if he's not truly an elf, considering his lackeys hue. We will see.
Well not you, me. I will see hahaha. This chapter was great.
It has just the right punch to start things up! Let's go, Kensui!
| Sy chapter 11 . 8/14/2020
I haven't continued for a week so jumping into this right off the bat and reading the title confused me so much like wait, what happened, why "Sorrow and Comfort" what- OH RIGHT HARUMI DIED lol
I've also forgotten about the apparent holes in wall? Wait, what holes, wh, is it from the battle? I remember it happened right outside Kensui's apartment, so I'm assuming so.
Oof the grave scene. Poor Ushio... :'( Satomu's a good friend.
It's also interesting to note that Ushio mentioned the fact that she has powers but unable to do anything to prevent Harumi's death. Oof. Oh well, it's alright Ushio, I believe in your strength to handle this mishap for character development!
Kensui passed out right through the funeral though... That sucks. The silence between him and Mela these past few days must've weighted heavily too. I appreciate that he managed to vocalize his thoughts on what he felt towards Harumi, and even when Mela tried to take the blame, he's genuine enough to assure her it wasn't her fault h. They have good chemistry, being able to complement each other and lift one another up like these in dark times. Thank goodness.
THE SUDDEN. ROYAL PARENTS.
Like I know they're up to something and this is probably a part of their ploy with the sister to get these two(Mela and Kensui) together again later, but cmon lmao. THEY JUST BED ONE ANOTHER(im assuming), LET THEM BE IN THEIR AFTERGLOW LOL
I'm not even gonna mention Astald's evil monologue except it's kind of funny a guard noticed he's monologuing and commented xD
I'm gonna get more things to eat while I continue this hhh theres construction dudes hammering and drilling things all over the house so thats why I prefer to read things at night while its peaceful and quiet, but just One More Chapter after I find food!
| Sy chapter 10 . 8/9/2020
OH... Oh... Oh.
Now I see why those lights entered their bodies at different areas, well sans Harumi which foreshadowed what ends her instead haha rip
Goodness, this was a surprise read!
Ok ok I am ticking my guess list, so what ended up becoming true is Kensui's mysterious elven lineage and the Elven Star being some kinda superpower.
What I didn't expect; Harumi being dead /this/ early (tho that explains why you didn't give her much character or development) and the goblins being killed off right on the spot, hot damn Kensui.
Then again, he /does/ have trauma of people around him dying, but this time it happens in front of him, so I guess that warrants even more therapy.
This story feels so anime, like it went from slice-of-life, to harem, to isekai, to shounen in the span of 10 chapters, props to you!
Well now that it has been established that Kensui can transform into an elf, the friends are in-the-know of what's happening and they've witnessed a murder, I am guessing the tone of the story will shift in a bit! Intriguing!
Aaaaa I have worktrip starting tomorrow, pray I have wifi so I can read the next chapter!
| Sy chapter 9 . 8/8/2020
Omg. It's only a month and Sakura and Astald went not just to third base, but home run? Oof.
Also I am kind of confused on that spell(?) he says; Wanwa Rina? Not sure what that does, and why they're in skimpy clothes, but things like these fly over my head and I usually have difficulty connecting subtle clues anyway, so I'll move on and focus on the core topic of the chapter xD
DUEL OF MATRIMONY! Complete with Clothing Damage trope in play! Just Kalina being a chessmaster in these situations is kinda cool and I respect her about that, and at the same time, she was also being genuine regarding her reason for liking Kensui, so it's really fascinating seeing her this driven to push Mela's and Kensui's relationship deeper.
I had no diea what consummate as a word means but I'm glad wordweb explains it hahaha. Still, I'm glad they reunited! And then directly teleported to his friends, while Mela is still almost topless from those fights, and they are kissing. Oh boy, time to explain the entire thing, huh Kensui.
Aaaa I plan to catch up more chapters, but I have some work I need to finish! I'll probably stay up all night just tryna finish this work and if I managed to do it, then I'll continue the next chapter as a reward to myself!
Thank you for writing this, it's such a fun and intriguing journey so far!
| Sy chapter 8 . 8/7/2020
AHA! I CALLED IT! OHMYGOD.
Okay, so you started this chapter with Astald noticing a peculiar ring, and I was immediately like OH THIS IS THE ITEM that's gonna be extremely important later, and then when I reached the end of the chapter, I outwardly gasped so loud, oh my god! I expected /importance/ but not FORMER ROYAL FAMILY CREST.
This opens up A CRAPTON of possibilities in my head omg, I'm having fun just playing with these different thoughts, like are the Kusinagis a part of that family, were their ancestors one of the royal elven family, did they had to flee to the human world or something, did one of their ancestors stole the ring from an elf, are there elves secretly living in the human world already, and a dozen other things just jumping from one point to another in my head hahahaha! I mean, I have no context, so I can't really base any of my assumptions to anything.
Then again there's that Elven Star light that merged itselves into Kensui and co, I wonder if it has anything to do with the ring. Maybe the ring is just one part of the whole thing. Maybe each of those kids had different crests that connect to them to SOME things in Eldamar, I don't know lmao
Talk about Eldamar! Kalina! Is this gonna be the start of the Eldamar arc where he's gonna stay in this realm and learn of their culture and teachings and possibly combat lmao, idk I'm lowkey worried because Kalina transported him right smack on the frickin CLIFF of eternal broken bones, and thinking if its foreshadowing something is... brrr. Scary. Good luck on whatever the future holds for you, Kensui.
However, by standing on that cliff, he also saw the beauty that is Eldamar. I feel like that's gonna be symbolic for something later. Scary cliff, then pretty elven atmosphere. Hmm. I also like that Kensui's firsth thought upon seeing it at first sight is wondering why tf did Mela want to stay with him. That single line of thought already tells a lot of how he cares for her, haha. Oh, to be young and in love lmao.
I also like that Astald dropped by just to say "heehoo it is my destiny to marry the princess bc I'm a noble huehue" and like a scene later, he found out the Kusinagi family might also probably be noble lmfao, the irony.
I am genuinely questioning whether Kalina really intended to start a love triangle thing, considering she also supports Mela's relationship with Kensui. Hmm, oh well. I'll just see it as healthy competition for now to win the dude's heart, haha. Poor Harumi getting left behind though.
My prediction from all the chapters so far is, all these 4 kids will be brought in Eldamar for some reason(probably regarding the Elven Star, idk), and then Astald will be the traitor/big bad, though I'm not sure if there are bigger forces in play in the future so I'll keep that thought to the side for now. There might be some kind of kidnapping and a trade, a need for higher power to defeat something, aaaand most likely some sort of sacrifice(s?). I have absolutely no bases to connect these final three randomass predictions to, it's just a feeling haha.
Either way! ELDAMAR ARC, LET'S GOOOOO
| Sy chapter 7 . 8/6/2020
My heartburn settled for tonight, so I can FINALLY read in peace! And oh my goodness, THIS IS MY FAVORITE CHAPTER SO FAR! I absolutely ADORE how you weave your way to explain certain KEY important plot points! Ohmygosh, I don't know how the original went, but I must also thank your beta for convincing you to rewrite, it's great, everything is THERE! The clues! The hook! The possibilities! I'm already imagining what would happen for SEVERAL sideplots as I read this... mygod.
Okokok so! Lemme list my thought process as I read this.
First of all, you BAITED me with this title, how dare you! xD The WAY you made the boys connect and understand what love meant, which automatically became the KEY for Kensui to understand his own feelings for Mela is ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL. Hook, line and sinker. Just. The fact that Kensui kiss him and Satomu immediately DECKED him in the face was so Genius. God, the flow of this. HNG. AND they get closer and bonded because of it, which is again KEY for Kensui to explain Mela's situation to his most trusted bro. THIS WRITING. I can't express enough how happy it made me, omg.
Ok, second point is Sakura!
The way you introduced her the first time, I thought she's just gonna be a side character, like one of those NPCs with no portraits, which made me hope otherwise because I'm those weirdos who tend to support the side characters lol. AND THIS DEVELOPMENT. WITH "ARTHUR". IS GREAT and I have already formed like 3 different speculations from their interaction alone hahaha.
ASTALD being ALLIES with the enEMIES THO! I! I'm disappointed I didn't expect that, I had too much hope on him, Astald why. Okay but the WHY is more intriguing to me to question so I appreciate this development and I will shut up before I start going off track xD
Uhh what else, I remember I have 4 points...
OH! THE ELVEN STAR!
THE LIGHTS THAT ENTERED THEIR BODIES! I'm not fully sure what that means yet but I'm more curious why she didn't sense it from Kensui, which is probably a hint I missed from previous chapters gahhh
Either way, splendid job on this chapter! I adore it.
I WANT TO CONTINUE READING ONE MORE CHAPTER but it's nearly 4am and I have to pass out hhhh
However, please understand that reading this completely overturn my foul mood from idk 6 hours of heartburn suffering, so thank you so much! 3
| Sy chapter 6 . 8/4/2020
Gotta give credit to Harumi for running into the couple and starts tailing them with admirable determination, haha.
I was worried for a second because Harumi heard Mela said she'd be honored to meet Kensui's sister, because just 2 lines before, Mela outwardly said she's a princess. But since Harumi chose to worry about the sister part rather than the princess part, I can only assume she missed to hear the previous lines, phew.
Ah! The classic elevator-got-stuck talk!
I can see that you needed them to talk and connect at this point, and some parts felt a little rushed, but the intent works. For instance, I'm glad to learn BOTH of their pasts.
Good god, Mela! Your training! Holy crap! The fall thing sounds terrifying, how'd you come up with this? The trials to forge a princess sounds like hellscape, but Mela takes it in stride since it's the norm there, probably. Us humans can only gape at such an experience... Brr. -Wait, does that mean Kalina had to undergo the same thing as well? Oof.
Kensui's story, though... That must've hit hard. Parents dying on your birthday is an overdone cliche past for main characters, but I get sad every time, oof :'( Now I see the guilt he's been harboring quietly exploded when he talked about it, I'm starting to think Mela might be one of the first few people he talked about it fully with. I'm unsure if his friends knew the full story, but I'm certain it must be hard for him to recall such a dreadful thing every time he has to bring it up. Hang in there, kiddo.
And of course, after sharing such important parts of themselves to one another, intimacy takes place. Nice.
Oh! I was fairly surprised to learned there's supernatural forces at play regarding the elevator! And was more surprised to read Kalina and the royal parents were the ones to blame! Or rather, thank for! Hahahah! They're right though, they needed to do something to get those two to open up since Mela is too polite while Kensui is too closed up. It worked well, good job family.
Oh, also that ending though!
Now it makes sense to me why Satomu blushed that one time the boys were talking before!
Poor Harumi, your number of rivals increased.
Oh, but this means Satomu and Ushio aren't together like I assumed a few chapters ago! How surprising!
Also thanks to this chapter, I finally recalled that Satomu was the one who played cupid for the both of them. Hmm, I wonder why. Well, I'm sure I'll learn soon!
Damn Kensui, what did you do in your past life to have gained so many love interests? You may have a tough past, but you're loved by the people around you. ;v;
There's so much interesting surprises in this chapter, I enjoyed it! Can't wait to read the next one tomorrow!
| Sy chapter 5 . 8/4/2020
You know what I find interesting every time I read a new chapter? When you point out the difference of human and elven culture.
For this chapter, it's about school! Or to be exact, education. The variable is their age difference. So of course school is necessary for humans with low lifespan and not for the long-lived elves. It's pretty cool to read and I like it.
Okay but when Mela tries to smooth out the misunderstanding between the friends, I appreciate that they take the logical approach (mainly Ushio) and point certain things out, hahaha. It's also refreshing that they didn't buy the explanation fully. I just really appreciate that you're able to mix the humorous anime parts with the believable logical parts seamlessly without breaking any groundwork. It's a gift.
Okay, but I recalled you mentioning sometime earlier about how Mela reads Harry Potter and got to the house elves part and got understandably upset, haha!
My god, Harumi really wanted to know what their true relationship is, huh. I wish I know what started her feelings for him in the first place, and how they became a couple, and who confessed first. With her being this suspicious, she must like him a lot!
Oh! Kensui is finally ruminating! Thank goodness he's the type to question himself and his problems. Some harem protagonists are so bad, they wanted all the girls smh, so I respect Kensui for at least understanding he needs to come to a decision. Good on you, kid!
Also, the fact that he's warming up to Mela now; Adorable.
| Sy chapter 4 . 8/3/2020
AHH Kalina! I'm finally meeting her!
Haha I decided to read 2 chapters tonight because I missed 2 nights of reading! Should be 3 chapters including tonight, but I'm too sleepy hhh
Anyway, Kalina! What a strong first impression!
Also I forgot to mention this before, but I appreciate the elves' spells incantation, it sounds really cool! I also like that you mentioned what Mela's name meant in elven language.
Is Melamin, the title, based on her full name?
Kalina as a character adds spice in their relationship, and as I expected, of course she would like the protagonist too hahaha. What I didn't expect was she likes him romantically! Goodness, what do these elves see in him, hahaha! This chapter focuses on her introduction and how her dynamic works with the couple and I think the way you established it was great!
Also I was under the impression that Mela couldn't take the two goblins, but after seeing her single-handedly take down this ogre, my thought changed that maybe she /could/ take them, she just didn't have a chance to, considering Lord Astald came out of nowhere to lend his aid, hahaha.
Overall, funny chapter! Can't wait to see what's in store next!
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/3/2020
An amusement park chapter! With a battle at that! Nice!
The small tease of /something/ afoot with the goblins needing to kidnap someone is intriguing~!
At first I thought they were after Harumi, considering they tried to attack Kensui's box first and even threw her off the box, which fascinates me because I'm still wondering what those lights that entered the kids' bodies in the very first chapter meant. But once Mela showed up, my assumption changed into them wanting to kidnap her instead, since they seem to know her, which makes more sense considering her royal lineage. I don't know, I'll just have to see, haha.
Also I was quite surprised to learn the pink-haired meganekko girl and the redhead artist is an item! Persumably.
The introduction of Lord Astald! His appearance surprised me but was welcomed by the circumstance, because Mela doesn't seem like she can handle two goblins at the same time. I'm more interested in the fact that he has no idea she's married now, which means her parents probably hasn't sent word in their realm of their daughter's married status, WHICH MEANS something is bound to happen soon with that information being withheld, hahah. Still, I suppose with Kensui having Harumi who's into him, Mela having Lord Astald who seems to like her balances things out, with the usual anime love triangle logic. I'm excited to read the development of this!