|Reviews for The Mourning Sword|
| Guest chapter 26 . 4/23/2017
Loved your story. Thank you.
| Guest chapter 26 . 7/14/2016
This should be rated T at most.
| IrishWolfGirl chapter 26 . 5/11/2016
Kind of wish she had some sort of better relationship with her grandfather, oh well that's my wishful thinking he he, loved the story. I much prefer allary's character to other princesses in stories I've read.
| Puffgirl1952 the 2nd chapter 26 . 3/11/2016
This was a good book; I hope there will be a sequel to it...
| Calabria1292 chapter 1 . 11/18/2015
This is one of those rare stories that you occasionally find on fiction press that is truly fantastic! It was unexpected and exciting as well as a truly beautiful love story!
| Sha chapter 1 . 10/30/2015
Love this opening poem!
| Violet Dahlia chapter 26 . 9/12/2015
I absolutely loved your story! However, if there is one change that I might suggest, I think it would be a good idea to go back through the earlier chapters and change Orlon's name to Olivio. When I got to the chapter where you decided to change his name I was a bit confused, until I saw your author's note. I believe that the story would flow better if you were to go back and change it, but that is totally up to you, it is your story after all. Thank you so much for taking the time to write such a wonderful story and to share it with all of us.
| Shehrazaad chapter 26 . 6/17/2015
I loved this story! Great job! I'm the type of person who waits until a story is finished before reading it, and then power-reading it in one day. I really loved Allary's character and story. I also loved how you brought elements of legitimate world-building into your novel-the language development, the 1,000-year history, the political intrigue. I especially loved the way you presented the conflict. "Show not tell" is a great method to go by, and you did it really well. I think the climax was one I didn't see coming. I loved that Allary didn't defeat Duarte by combat, which is her well-developed skill, but by political maneuvering, which she had to become good at throughout the story. Well done!
| Ray-Anne chapter 26 . 6/18/2015
Whaaaat? Just as it was getting good it ended! It was like intrigue - end intrigue in a span of maybe two or three chapters. I'd think about elaborating the family connection. Elaborating the villian - motives, more background. More stumbling struggling. Why is it the king knew everything? Is there more to him? Is his behabior towards his sons with reason? I was really surprised it ended so quickly.
But that's a testament to the story really. You put so much effort in it after all with the language, history, and whatnot it was easy to get invested in it. Just sad it ended.
| FlamesFromPurpleFire chapter 26 . 6/10/2015
Amazingly well crafted and creative story. I really enjoyed reading The Mourning Sword. Looking forward to any future work you produce!
| Lorana chapter 26 . 6/1/2015
I am happy and sad this story is over. I just wish there was a bit of closure with her and Fausto. Also I was surprised you skipped over the ceremony and Fenn meeting Thiago for the first time. I guess things to think of when doing edits or an epilogue. But otherwise I loved this story.
| Esther chapter 26 . 5/27/2015
I shouldn't even ask this, with so much editing ahead of you, but... will there be a sequel? Any plans for such a thing? I want to know how they keep the elven city from collapsing into the underground rivers. And I love this world you've created, I'm sad to leave it. I think you did wrap up all the basic plot lines here, though.
Congratulations on finishing the first draft :) Best of luck editing.
| MTveit chapter 26 . 5/29/2015
Aaah, thank you for that perfect ending. I swear I'm so in love with Thiago! And Allary is such a badass, amazing protagonist. Great job!
| notjustink chapter 26 . 5/27/2015
Wow what a fast update! Congratulations on completing Allary and Thiago's story :) I'm very glad I stumbled upon this a few months ago.
| Esther chapter 25 . 5/27/2015
Ahhh! Brilliant! This chapter made me so happy :) That was so clever and perfect, using the broken sword against Duarte like that! And I like how Theodoro is fair in this chapter. He might be awful to Thiago sometimes, but he's not evil. And I respect him for that.
Just one question—why did Thiago ask Allary quietly? Then the people don't know what the pact is...