Reviews for The Mourning Sword
Esther chapter 25 . 5/27/2015
Ahhh! Brilliant! This chapter made me so happy :) That was so clever and perfect, using the broken sword against Duarte like that! And I like how Theodoro is fair in this chapter. He might be awful to Thiago sometimes, but he's not evil. And I respect him for that.
Just one question—why did Thiago ask Allary quietly? Then the people don't know what the pact is...
notjustink chapter 25 . 5/26/2015
AHHHHH oh my god I was NOT expecting that. Allarí's plan was absolutely brilliant and so well constructed! Great job :)
MTveit chapter 24 . 5/15/2015
Aaah, this story is amazing!
I just adore Allari and Thiago. The love scene was written tastefully and beautifully. Great job!
doc2or chapter 24 . 4/14/2015
Is it getting hot in here? lol Well it was never a question of 'if', just 'when'. Certainly a love affair exposed to the public might just be big enough to obscure the broken sword and could even be a way to unite the kingdoms. This is just an amazing and enthralling story, thank you so much.
Esther chapter 23 . 4/8/2015
A lot happened in this chapter! The king knows everything, Thiago loves Allary, Ollala stole the sword... Wow! It doesn't seem too disjointed to me. You have a lot of subplots, so a lot of different things are happening.
I can't wait for an update! I really like where this is going :)
L chapter 4 . 4/7/2015
Love it so far! Gorgeous images!
LoveAntiquity chapter 23 . 4/8/2015
Hmm... I wonder what could possibly cause a sensation greater than the breaking of the mourning sword... a wedding perhaps? Of certain political merit? ;)

I look forward to the next chapter; keep up the writing!

MTveit chapter 22 . 3/29/2015
Aaaah! I absolutely adore this story!
A drop of Romeo brought me here, and I'm so thankful to them, and to you, of course. This story is captivating. The world building, characters, plot - they're all very engaging. Allary is a strong protagonist, without being Mary Sueish at all, so thumbs up for her. And Thiago... Think I'm falling a bit in love, myself!
Can't wait to see what happens next!
Fawn chapter 22 . 3/25/2015
Great update! Thanks for continuing to write for us! :)
Esther chapter 22 . 3/24/2015
I'm so glad you're getting back on track! I missed this story.
I like how Allary is becoming more independent, and how even though she's sort of using Milene, she feels guilty about it. How much of what went on with Thiago did Milene catch? And why has it taken so long to find her mother?
I can't wait for the next update!
Fawn chapter 21 . 3/22/2015
This is spectacular! You have restored my hope in finding good undiscovered gems on FictionPress! Hope you continue to write!
hopelessromantic0160 chapter 21 . 3/21/2015
I just read all 19 chapters in one story is absolutely amazing and so incredibly unique! I'm amazed that it has so few reviews and isn't so much more popular. My suggestion would be to perhaps edit the story summary/synopsis in order to attract more people just browsing through the archive. Anyways, I can't wait for the next chapter. I had a sneaking suspicion while I was reading that you were going to reveal a twist like this. :) As much as I can understand why Allary was rejected by her grandfather I hope that they can eventually reconcile-she is his own flesh and blood after all.
Anxiously waiting to see what happens next!
A-new-colour chapter 21 . 3/21/2015
Wow. This is beautiful, to say the least. I read the whole thing two days before my final biology exam. You're changing my priorities.
I love the strength of Allary's character. She's wonderful, and the story is woven so intricately I can't help but be drawn in.
Also. I quite like Orlón. Did ya know it is also the name of a polymer? I read that for my chemistry final. Joy.
Anyways. I can't wait till this story is updated.
You have me hooked, but don't leave me hanging :)
Pseudonym59 chapter 1 . 3/20/2015
I really like the world building this sets up. :)
Esther chapter 21 . 3/18/2015
YAY an update! I'm so glad you've not given up on this story! This is an interesting development. Unexpected, but it could work. I really like how Allary got the chance to see the poorer areas of the city in their natural state—it gives her and me a much better idea of the city as a whole. It also says a lot about Allary's character that she stopped to help the little girl while in the middle of her own crisis. I have missed this story.
I hope you'll update soon! Good luck pushing through that writer's block :)
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