I really liked the line "One with a stature that told an onlooker of its value." This was interesting as its clear Lanie doesn't like what she has to do, but still does it. She even apologizes. It does make you wonder what's going on around her.

-Veronica

It's good. It is difficult to understand, but it's good. It's well with concept. You should keep writing pieces like this. Good job, and keep it up.

It took me a couple of minutes to understand it but wow. It's really really good, keep it up!