3. All my hearts!

I love your writing style! It's so smoothly cool, so dotted with bits of pop and fizz, but just enough to flavor without taking over. A nice, peppery style, shall we say? The way you avoided the main character's pov for most of the story made it seem as though I was looking into the world from small windows around the building. I so hope you're planning on writing more slash, and more longer stories like this!

Meesh, so sad this is over, I wish I read slower, or could forget and read it all again. Anyway, I loved this, it made me laugh and feel sad and relieved, in fact, all the emotions. I would greatly enjoy reading about the exploits of your potty mouthed heroine. I'll say again how enjoyable I found your writing style, and finally apologise for bombarding you with reviews while you probably sleep in your own timezone.
Thanks for sharing.
-Pantu

You know, at first I thought the psuedo-dad lable was just another quirk of your writing, but now I think about it it perhaps says more about Daniel than I realised. This chapter makes me nervous; I acidentally read the last warning at the end of the first chapter and now I'm waiting for the worst to happen. I hope this can have some kind of HAE, but I'm sure I'll enjoy it whatever the outcome for your interesting writing.

Still no clue where this is set. I'm swinging toward America more now. I really like the slow unravelling of who and what everyone is, the switching perspectives really add something fun, as do the page break titles. Your toned back writing style is nice to read too. But right now I'm mostly sad that I only have four more chapters to go. ;)

What a great opening chapter. I've had this bookmarked to read for ages now and I'm glad I've finally got around to it. I like the jumping perspective and the kooky writing style. I'll be honest and say I have utterly no idea where this is set. I feel like it could be America or Sweeden/Norway, though I think the Scandinavian thing is purely because of the names.

I l;oved this story, but I think it would benefit from more material towards the end.

awww loved this.
This was so different and so amazing.
Loved Jemima and Neal's relationship too, it was all awesome.
Thankyou.

Ah short and sweet eh? Overall a really enjoyable read, and your writing style is beautiful :)

Okay, I have a bit of concrit but obviously this is just my opinion so take it or leave it as you wish. I feel you have the potential to make this story 'bigger'- and tbh I think you know that as you seem to suggest with your author's note at the end.
As it is, it lacks emotional punch because you didn't really go into any depth with all the huge emotional events these wonderful characters go through- they happen and then we're on to something else. And all the background relationships give great interest but only if they're followed up. So I'm left with feeling, yeah, that was nice, beautifully written story but ultimately I'm unaffected. And I can't help feeling if you really went for it, this could be a great, emotionally powerful story, it could be unforgettable.

I greatly look forward to reading whatever you come up with next.

Suki

Yay, happy ending! More or less! Great story.

Man, the way this story starts out all comedy is such a trick. I love it, though. It wouldn't have nearly as much impact if you showed your cards from the start.

Wow really wonderful chapter- I love that we got a bit more of Tobe. I'm infinitely interested in finding out the whole truth about Daniel. Good job.

Suki

What a very very fine, compelling story. I really love these characters, more and molre every chapter.

I really enjoyed reading what you've written on this so far... I really like how the narrative voice changes, well especially in the first chapter, where we see how the story progresses from different characters' points of view, but focused on what's happening between A and T.
Later it gets a bit more conventional in that it just feels like there is separate storylines, but your writing still feels quite refreshing!
I am really curious to see what happens after ch4...
Thanks :)

I'm definitely hooked on this. Still bemised by your peculir way of doing warnings, but enjoying these characters very much.