Reviews for Fated
TheDeadlyEscape chapter 5 . 2/8/2014
Scott killed Kate? Omg . . . Can't wait for the next chapter
TheDeadlyEscape chapter 4 . 2/5/2014
Kate's dead! *sniffle*
Anyways, I loved this chapter!
TheDeadlyEscape chapter 3 . 1/28/2014
I'm in love with this book! Seriously, the third chapter made me lose my mind when I saw you hadn't updated to the fourth yet. I hope you update soon :)
Exmoorpony chapter 2 . 1/25/2014
And the plot thickens. Beautiful story progression. I look forward to seeing more. It's great so far!
Exmoorpony chapter 1 . 1/25/2014

Drum roll please...

THAT WAS FREAKING AMAZING! Your ideas are great, and the facts weave nicely. The ending also peaks a reader's interest. It sure did with me. Plus, this is the sort of thing I love to read.

My only criticism is the way you surround your quotations. Normally, the only way a quotation is in a new paragraph is if there was a quotation ending that previous paragraph. For example,

Jack loved dogs. "Hey boy, come here."

"Woof. I can talk, you know."

Simplistic as that example may be, that's the way quotations are supposed to be done. That's the only criticism I have though. I look forward to the next chapter. I love the story so far.