Very interesting start! can't wait for the nest chapter :)

This is absolutely brilliant. I really want to read more of this

I actually really like this story so far! :)
I'm pleasantly surprised that a girl your age could write this. I'm older, and my skills don't even come close. XD

And I don't know if you did this on purpose, but I found it quite humorous when Aden was 'relieving himself' in the bathroom. XP That was some pretty good comedy at work, cos it kinda came out of nowhere.

Anyway, I'd like to read more, so please update soon! :3