|Reviews for Winter|
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/18/2018
Hi I hope you're still reading reviews but if not I hope you got some seventh sense there to feel that someone still loves this story after all these years. I read this first when I was seventeen. I was inlove. There were things about my preferences in life that absolutely awakened. And all these years I kept this story in the back of my head how Denny and Lucas are most likely very happy with each other now. This story just touched me so much.
I'm twenty one now, graduated college and has a life ahead of me. Maybe it'll be bad or I might just make it big. Regardless, this story is still something I'll think about when circumstances allows me.
| CREEEEEEEEED chapter 1 . 4/25/2016
Strangely beautiful. Probably because it's so well written.
| ajashire1 chapter 1 . 4/23/2016
I absolutely adored this.
Brilliant. Just Brilliant. :')
Thanks for the fantastic read!
P.S Started listening to Mozart halfway through. Went together perfectly tbh.
| somersaultkick chapter 1 . 1/10/2016
It's kind of sad how they endure being separated for 11 years. I love this story, it is amazing.
| Shiro Bondevik chapter 1 . 4/25/2015
Amazing story. This should have more hits.
| DutchAver chapter 1 . 3/29/2015
It doesn't happen often that a story on FP leaves me baffled and speechless because of how well-written it is. Didn't even notice it had about 20K words because I read it in one sitting, and honestly, I rarely do that with a piece that long. Good job!
| chocovic-chu chapter 1 . 3/8/2015
My second brocest story from FictionPress and it's absolutely beautiful. The funny thing is when I read Denny and Lucas, they remind me of this pairing from a certain anime, not the brocest but their voices. I like them.
Thanks for sharing.
| Jodiexxx chapter 1 . 12/28/2014
I read this a while back! C: I'm sorry it took me so long to review!
To be frank, I found it really painful reading them sort of playing the waiting game, like they were just...waiting for each other. I felt pretty lonely for all three of them (Maddy, Lucas and Denny) actually... I'm glad they ended up together.
Anyway, your way of describing things is beautiful. They tug on my heart strings. Thanks for this great work! It was painful, beautiful and totally worth it. :)
| StaryStory chapter 1 . 12/20/2014
Your writing is beautiful and this is VERY well written. It's an interesting and welcomed change from most of the writing found online, and I love how developed the characters are and how you can make them say so much while saying so little.
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/18/2014
Wow... I really liked this story. I was actually getting a little frustrated before I found this because I haven't been able to find any stories that interested me on this site for a while but you definitely changed that. Your writing style is beautiful and you have been gifted with an amazing way with words. If I wasn't so starstruck, I'd probably be jealous. Keep up the good work :) You're an amazing writer and I look forward to reading more of your work!
| AThoughtCreated chapter 1 . 7/6/2014
To put it simply: This story made my body stay riveted as a statue to finish in one sitting which resulted in my stomache twisting into tangles, my mind feeling submerged, and my heart crumbling to bits.
Your details in all aspects made this piece BREATHE. I was not reading, but listening to voices and music and watching the characters' distances between each other decline and grow.
This was good. Very good.
| FlowersBite chapter 1 . 6/15/2014
I really liked it!
| Pantu chapter 1 . 6/5/2014
This was hauntingly lovely. I stopped half way through and read it in two sittings because it was just too nice to be over so soon. Your artistic narration style worked perfectly to portray your characters and the metamorphosis of their relationship. In a way it was almost painful to read because of how you put across they're losses and longing - in a good way if that is possible.
Anyway, thank you so much for sharing your beautiful story.
| A Round of Artificiality chapter 1 . 5/1/2014
This was a very long poem-that's how I would think of it. Time passes by without being felt; there's a sense of eternality and languidness that I truly enjoyed. I also loved the abstract nature of the writing, skirting around simple words and instead using broad definitions and motions. The epitome of the 'show, don't tell' kind of writing that teachers harp on (though yours is a more lyrical version).
Though there were some parts where it bordered on purple prose and I had to wade through the words to understand what you originally meant. This story would be absolutely incredible once polished, your characters guarantee it.
Okay, so I finally got to the real issue. I had tears in my eyes when I finished, that's how much the story got to me. This is not my first 'brothercest' so there was no shock factor here but I can't help but think of how natural and truly inevitable Denny and Lucas's relationship felt. With other stories that shared the same concept, I felt some inhibitions (and distance) despite me rooting for the brothers to somehow work out. With Denny and Lucas, however, I was thinking "OMG, they're brothers" in a completely different way.
I think you phrased it aptly: "But what Denny understands is what Lucas doesn't; the blood that damns them is also what binds them to each other. It's what makes this forever." This is why, to Lucas, Becca -the woman he loved- was incomparable to Denny, and explains the quiet start, pause, and resume of their relationship. Because they're brothers and there's no running away from blood. I didn't really put it eloquently but I understand the sentiment and completely understand and feel for the two.
Still, I have a question or two about Denny's conversation (it was more of a one-sided convo) with Becca. Becca was barely coherent (which fits since she's supposedly drunk and emotional) but I'm curious about what she said: "You knew. You know him, don't you? You know all of him." Did she understand the hint about their relationship behind the remark? Or does she mean that she never knew "all of Lucas" because she never knew about Denny? I don't know why I can't get over this but Becca's words with Denny keep cycling in my head.
You can totally not answer this since your story is -for all intents and purposes- complete but I'm just allergic to ambiguity and 'I leave it to your interpretation's. XD
And the poem by Frost (he's one of favorite poets)! It makes sense to use it to describe Denny and Lucas but the meaning all changes when that wall crumbles because of that something that doesn't love it. And it's a happy forest of pine and apple trees after that. Hehehe.
Anyways, I'm ending this long-winded review here. Will check out your other stories
| MizuAz chapter 1 . 4/18/2014
I can't tell you how much I loved this story. Finding literary style slash writing is a difficult endeavor. The way you unfolded the relationship between the brothers was so carefully and beautifully done. Leaving the very important sex scenes to the imagination with just the simplistic outlines describing bruising, touches, a smile...that just gave the brothers an aching, fragile closeness. I'm thrilled you posted here and hope you have more coming. I noticed your sci fi story is not complete! Considering you only have a few stories gifted to us, I do hope you plan on finishing it eventually, as sci fi is my favorite genre, and I know your talent would do it a great service.