|Reviews for Poetry Anthology|
| The Autumn Queen chapter 1 . 3/20/2014
As a whole, this is a gorgeous poem. I like how you go about describing the day, mixing the line between definition and metaphorical use - at some points I wonder if the fay is the thing being described or the tool you're using to describe other things. Very clever language use there.
I feel like you're overusing your fullstops. Almost every line ends in one, and that makes the reading a little slower and more jagged than it had to be, particularly at the beginning. The one on the second line in particular I think is too long a pause for its context; perhaps, like the last two lines, join them through a comma or an and?