I'm glad she found someone else. Good for you, Ariana! Some people may be upset by this chapter, but i thought it was perfect, and I love Alessandro. I really hope Trevor doesn't screw this up for her. As much as I loved him in the beginning, and I do hope he has his own happy ending, I think Ariana is much better off without him. I'm really sad this story is ending! I've really enjoyed it ever since the beginning, especially since it was so different from the others I've read on this site. I can't wait to read the final chapter!

I would like to see a prologue with Trevor in some much needed therapy. Maybe having become a celibate Buddhist monk. I enjoyed this ending. I would just like some closure for ole Trevor. Well done again!

I've learned to survive

Wow. So here I am at chapter 24.
Self-fulfilling prophecy, or what?

You know, Trevor just went completely mental after his mother died. Hitting James, threatening Jackson, turning into a paranoid wreak, delusional about Ariana still being his girlfriend...must I continue?

It's a vastly different trajectory to the subtle manupliation he was doing before. I read in a previous AN, that you'd planned things different, but somehow you wound up taking this route. I wonder if it was because you thought everyone had written Trevor off (partially guilty myself.)

I feel sorry for the guy, he needs so much time and space to heal.
Now, I'm left wondering what's going to happen to him.

You're doing great, keep your nerves steady. I really will be here till the final chapter.
Also keep that blend you have going of prose and dialogue. I'm worried you might think because I love your dialogue so much (lol) you might just write a script, with stage directions rather than adding the prose inbetween. I love both, just balance the two like you've been doing (I feel like I've said this to you before.)

Once again, I apologise profusely for making you read all my physcobabble.
*winks*

Omg!
I just realised what I said.
That's not what I meant at all!

I don't think this story is a biography, just like it reads like one. Not even that. Clearly, this is a piece of fiction, but the characters are portrayed in a realistic way. Am I making sense? Please don't kill me!

You do it so well. Ariana falling for his charms, and now romanticizing the idea of marrying him. I can see everything through her eyes, and support how she's feeling, how nice he is to her, everything, but I can also step back and see what all her friends are seeing.

He's still isolating her. Deliberately enjoys Eric's misery, and openly taunts him about it. Used Denise's secret (about being gay) against her, so Ariana and Denise would have an awkward wedge between then. I'm glad they're chatting again. At least, there's that.

He seems sweet, but displays mygonistic values like his father (women are weak, need to be protected. But you're strong.)
Speaks favourably about his father (at times)
His mother is a raging alcoholic, severly depressed and stuck in a horrible relationship with Mr. Mattheson. (But Trevor doesn't directly acknowledge this even once. In fact, his family is very dysfunctional but he encourages Ariana to pop round, have dinners with them, despite his father being a nightmare, and his mom...his poor mom...)

I know all of this might sound like I'm tearing Trevor to pieces, but I'm not! Honestly, I find it fascinating, I haven't really come across genres and topics like this before. It's not done nearly enough, I think!

I've made up my mind about him. Trevor is not abusive physically, and he clearly sees the flaws of his father and doesn't want to be like him. Yet, in small areas he IS like him, and he spouts his father's propaganda (even Ariana notices) without him realizing he's doing it. He's very contradictory. His family is not fine, yet they play hosts, and take prom pictures, and it's like they're any other normal people.

In that sense, the realism of your story has is HUGE. People ARE contradictory. People CAN portray certain values of a decent home life, whilst not having it.

Seriously. When I said I felt like this was a biography, I now feel even more strongly about it.
You are very good at what you do.

Also, your dialogue STILL remains my most favourite bits about your story. You've also stopped with those summarizing paragraphs, and I'm loving it, and I'm loving the development I'm seeing before my very eyes of your writing and characters.

Well done, Shadowswept :)

So Trevor doesn't want to get married at 16! Phew. (It came across that way in the previous chapters.) Still strange though he's fo fixated on that idea, considering how young he is. It's like he's obsessed with Ariana's virginity, and keeping her pure. What if she split up with him, and slept with someone else? Will he stop being so gentle and be rough instead?

So much for coming back at the end.
First of all - I'm flying through the chapters! Can't believe Trevor's dad has a boxing ring in his basement. And he's using it to beat up his son. Denise is a a good friend, and all her warnings are ringing clear. He's isolating her, isn't he?

If anything this story is a cracking account of the beginnings of an abusive relationship. Ariana thinks she can "save" him, but don't we all? I want her to run far far away, but she's just letting him manupliate her, and snogging him, like that would solve everything.

Trevor's family has a lot of issues.
I applaud you in writing this cautionary tale, I think it could potentially open up the eyes of many young women, who come across damaged men, so they can recognize the signs and know well enough when to leave alone. Sure guys like Trevor shouldn't be written out of society, but like someone said (was it Denise again?) he needs prefessional help.

I'm almost reading this like a biography, than a romantic tale.
Who knows Trevor might turn things around, but I'll have to read much further to comment.
Thank you for writing this, I'm enjoying myself and I'm not getting distracted or anything, like I'm sooo intent and interested...

Hmm. Watch out for me again!
PS: Alarm bells are ringing about why Trevor's so fixated on marriage at the age of 16. It's like he wants to repeat his parents mistakes! Or maybe he doesn't? Because his mom got knocked up, before dropping out and getting married, so is that why he's so hellbent in marrying first, babies later?

Gaah! I'm so sorry for writing so much but I'm truly engrossed. I had some free time today, which I'm monopolizing by coming here, and blabbering.

Trevor has reached an all new level of insanity. He's honestly terrifying. Ariana really shouldn't have gone to his house. She would be better off avoiding him until she goes off to college and just never look back. And I can't believe she would tell him that she loves him after all that. Even if it's true, she should have kept it to herself rather than give him the impression that she'll want to get back together eventually. Hopefully she's learned her lesson now. Great chapter - update soon :)

The plot twists is what keeps me going man! Don't worry about nothing, at least I'll be here till the end! :D

Man oh Man I was so caught up in the drama I did not even notice the time line discrepancy. Let your muse guide, she's been great so far, don't worry about a rewrite. I am so shocked and dismayed by Trevor's behavior. He needs to get out of his dad's house. Am I a fool to hold out hope for him? Maybe this is just another way that Ariana will develop by letting go of him if he is not redeemable. Again props to you on delivering another riveting chapter.

Love your story I hope trevor will change for ariana :)

I forgot to say I changed my username from migilove to book lover

Turnoil? I never noticed anything I really love the story though :D . Every time if read a chapter my heart starts racing in anticipation and ugh my feelings are never right by the end of it D: . Trevor Trevor Trevor Trevor ugh. Please update soon I need to read more of this amazingly amazing story !

Trevor is just getting creepier as the story goes. Please, give Ariana some reprieve. And maybe even a happy(-ish) ending for Denise?