Reviews for Easier to Run
Julietish chapter 1 . 6/23/2014
Hello, it’s Juliet from ADoR! Thank you so much for participating in Star-Cross’d this round. I enjoyed your darker interpretation of the prompt. Holt’s psychiatric issues most certainly made him an interesting character. There’s a certain wording of a sentence that can be changed: “In the center of the mall was a water fountain and that was the place...” can be changed to “In the center of the mall was a water fountain, the place I planned...”. I hope you participate again next round!
MileyRowling chapter 1 . 5/15/2014
Great work!
AlysonSerenaStone chapter 1 . 4/17/2014
This was actually well written. I like that it is a thriller with a little romance thrown in. I did see a sentence that I had to go back and read again, but it made sense. I liked the changing of points of view and the time jump. Great work!