Reviews for Sleeping |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I think you stayed on prompt a lot better than some of the other entries that I have read. This is a very good entry and this sure was one tough Star Crossed round. I really did like what you did this prompt. This is a good one shot! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved the story! However, I noticed some inconsistency, I think. In the very beginning Lex said her mother died, but later on Josh says that he didn't want her mom to walk in to see them cuddling. Did I miss something? I think it would be better to introduce the topic of the fight earlier in the story? I had no idea why Josh was mad at her until they talked about it. But I loved the story! Good work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ah the old friend-turned-boyfriend situation :) My favourite. Haha! I loved that reference to Romeo and Juliet btw - subtle. Good luck for the comp! |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey ! :) that's a lovely story! :) really cute, i liked it :) -Kira from Germany. p.s. i'd be thankful if you'd check out my stories! :) |
![]() ![]() I thought it was great and that you totally stayed by the prompt. |