Wow, first off, this is powerful stuff. I had a :O face by the end. By the end of this poem I was felt I could feel the poolside tile under my feet, as if I was there watching the scene pay out before me.

Some of my favourite words/phrases - "velvet shadows", "furnace", "still dripping in my hair", "i'm sorry mother, i think i died that day", & "the wetness of life".

There are a few extra "little words" that I think can be taken out to provide for better fluidity. For example, "that" and "but".

I am so sorry this has happened to you. I truly wish you well. I too can relate to much of what you have written here and if you want to talk, I am here. Beautiful poetry nevertheless.

Beautiful as always!

Wow k
Lol this was great but I'm never taking anything after reading this xD

Favorite chapter yet

GJ!

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I like your plot and I hope you will continue writing till it's end.
BEST OF LUCK!

These are all really nice. Please keep updating. Hope to see more!

This sums up my nights lately, I just haven't been able to put them into words. I like how you said it much better than anything I would've come up with anyway.

Very relatable and a good question.

So much power in such a short poem. Sorry, I have a migraine and probably am not very articulate right now, but this is really good. Your descriptions of light and colour and smoke really emphasize the emotion.

This is so powerful. Especially the last stanza. Extremely vivid.

Is this about self-harm? This poem sums it up. Again bad memories are resurfacing for me. This poem makes me miss it.

I wish I could feel home in my own body...