|Reviews for Temporary Dark|
| cakelover2468 chapter 6 . 3/18/2015
YES A GOOD FICTIONPRESS AUTHOR WHO ACTUALLY UPDATES!
All the wisecracks and how the story is paced and everything... YES I CAN'T BELIEVE IT!
I'm in love with this already, and when I saw you updated, I pretty much freaked out!
Please update soon!
| Serendipital chapter 6 . 2/23/2015
This is a really interesting story! I'm looking forward to more. Good luck on the next chapter!
| Guest chapter 4 . 1/17/2015
I adore this story. The plot, the characters, the dialogue... Especially the dialogue! You rule for making this. Good job.
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/12/2014
Great story, great writing, really hope you update soon! Quick question: Are Temp and Benji gonna be the main characters, or will there be others? Guess I'll find out soon enough, anyhow. Good going! I like it.
| ArSee chapter 3 . 7/21/2014
This is a great story! Can't wait for the next chapter. But I will. Just so I don't miss it.
"Ar, you can't miss in a book."
Shaddap. Yes I can. I just don't want to.
| Guest chapter 3 . 7/21/2014
This chapters epic! I love the bro aspect with temp and benji a new bromance if the ages has emerged ! This will be spoken of in the future in the same status as green lantern and flash and Spider-Man and the human torch and simon and kamina and naruto and assume dude bro sis other whatever gender you are you are AWESOME!
| eddie.correa.77 chapter 3 . 7/21/2014
THIS CHAPTER THO! it's exactly what I wanted. The budding awesome friendship between Temporary and Benji was perfect. I love the dialogue they had and the brother like relationship they seemed to get at the end with the salutes. You completely listened to the probably shitty advice I have and made it so much more ! I'm so hyped for this story and were it's gunna go hey you should post it on some forums like sufficent velocity you'll probably get thons of help too and they will be able to even help you take it in different directions then you thought if you make it a quest . And your update pace is great. This whole chapter is just great. I'm gunna tell some Freinds about it spread the word and however way your doing it too seeing as this site is a lot less famous then FF and a lot do the other sites like say even watt pad. I hope this story blows up and you get recognition because the amount of boys in YA fiction has become a lot low. Even better would be if Temp was Latino or black or something .
| Guest chapter 2 . 7/19/2014
This is great! I really like the action scene I wonder what Temps power is. Looks like energy manipulation. That morph guy sounds cool quite alex mercery
| eddie.correa.77 chapter 2 . 7/19/2014
The chapter was a lot better than the last . Temps power looks cool not too OP but powerful enough to face against the adversary's he surely will fight against in the future. I enjoyed the nods to characters like saber tooth and wolverine in the jerk temp beat 70XP lol and I also liked how you went more into Temps mind set and living arraignments, it's quite relasistic for a orphan. I also enjoy how the dialogue seems relaxed and normal for the suituations. Could be a LITTLE better but writing can always get better right . Well onward to superhero hogwarts! Btw showing how a society with real superheroes/villains has more than just extremely OP people with powers is very awesome I hope you go more into the society and just how living the life temps gunna live would truly be like in a realistic world. Well awesome work mate 3.5/5 starts lol see you next chapter oh and UPDATE lol
| eddie.correa.77 chapter 1 . 7/17/2014
Eh seems like it could be promising just don't fall I to the easy reviews and follows trap of YA romance bull cocky mate if there is a romance make it idk not important to the core story or something because it seems like literally everything now has been soiled by fifty shades and twilight