Great update! I'm surprised to see you back!

Yeah...The one month I didn't read the entries seems to be when I miss amazing entries. Great work!

I love this! It's absolutely hilarious. I wish there was more. Indigo seemed to be a very well thought out character and even though it was a short story you got to the point perfectly and there was no real shift or jump in the changing of scenes, it all flowed grammar and punctuation is great as always and your tense and spelling had no errors whatsoever. It was an excellent story and made my night 110% better :) :) :)

Great job Augie! I chuckled several times while reading this, and the twist at the end was golden. For four hours, you really made a complete story. I didn't feel the time jumps distracted away from the overall plot at all. The only hitch in my reading came when Indigo meet Red Renard. "He was a tall and wearing a leather mask styled to look like a fox's head.". Deletion on that first 'a' will clear the hitch right on up. I will say I loved how Red Renard was trained in acrobats instead of fighting. How fun! Indigo was clever not to allow him to use tools that would give him an unnecessary advantage over her. And her weakness with superheroes and then the double entendres-Pure literary gold! I was so tickled. Whether you continue this or not, it was a great, fun, fast paced story and I really enjoyed it.

That was great. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It was equal amounts humour and adventure. I can really see this story being expanded into more chapters. I know I'd read it. I really liked the characters. They really made the story what it was. Excellent writing. Good luck in the contest. :)

What a fun little romp! I do hope you write more on this one, I like it.
Some of the time & scene jumps are a little rough, but that's the 3000 word thing. and it looks like you're missing the word 'see' in the 6th paragraph of the present day sequence, but I love that this was a four hour dump-cake work. We've had this discussion before - getting out of the way and letting the story come out is a great way to produce work with an organic feel to it that doesn't get bogged down in detail.
Well done, my friend!