Reviews for languish |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This piece resonates very strongly with me, especially now as, two weeks ago, I paid a visit to a childhood hometown I hadn't seen for at about 20 years. Whether it was meant to be read literally or not, you capture the mixed sentiments of coming 'home' very well, the memories almost devoid of context (at least, to the reader) but still vivid in particular, random ways, but also: 'you aren't sure what you came back here for' and 'what did you expect [...]?' I'm always a fan of how you craft your pieces, and in this one I enjoyed the repeated use of color, and navigating by degrees - the latter, seeming almost clinical, precise for something as fluid as memory. The choice to write in second-person POV always carries its risks, but paid off beautifully here, and by the end of the piece it's almost like reading a conversation with oneself. Powerful stuff. JM (for RG EF) |
![]() ![]() ![]() So, what an edgy piece that is very vivid and emotional. What is it working towards, though? The theme isn't that clear, but what is clear is that this is written like a piece of free verse poetry, almost. There's a sort of rhythm to it, and the thoughts within this are written like they would be written in a diary or memoir. It's very good, and like I said, edgy, but it's edgy because the theme hasn't been revealed fully yet. You should really create more pieces written in a similar format to hone in this skill, because it's fantastic. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh I could re-read this one over and over again :D It's just so achingly beautiful and chilling, in terms of language, presentation and themes. You could say it's a universal theme - that one of longing and wanting to re-familiarise yourself with something that you no longer have (and can only have through the form of memories), but it doesn't matter: I think the way you deal with it, with your gorgeous and very tangible metaphors, makes it worth every-read. Haha, what I mean is that I especially like the vividness of your metaphors, like that image of the path merging with the sky, turning into a dissonance, creating that vision of everything being painted in water colours. It's just really creative and stunning, in terms of what it does to my brain and how it presents itself as something you can definitely see :D :D I also really liked that image in the end, the penrose staircase that grows and extends infinitely. It's a fitting metaphor for how loss and memories, as well as the future are connected, and it's something that I feel everyone of us *feels*, but you can never quite put into words (though I think you did, very splendidly I might say 33). So I'm actually babbling, but I also like the very personal tone of this narrative: 'you' prose is really handled well, but I find this one both very personal and detached, because the intimate and personal never gets too intimate and personal - it's just little impressions here and there, of a place, a build that seems very real though, because I know a lot of people that get attached to buildings and then to attach a time/period of life to it. Anyhow, I'm saying that I just like how familiar this piece is, without ever becoming too specific about what it's really about too explicitly. ...Very beautiful :) |