Reviews for Voice
Iris Nightningale chapter 1 . 8/29/2014
I love the plot basically and I think you have a lot of potential as a writer. Looking forward to an update!
sindya chapter 1 . 8/17/2014
Nice story so far. It has lots of potential. Suggestions: Add some emotions to the story. Example: Instead of saying falling into despair, please describe her feelings so that way we can empathize with her. That is just telling not showing so it is hard to empathize with the main character. And question... you said no one else wanted to come see the voice today... can you add how that made the heroine feel? Add then the mother... also show how the heroine felt. I know you can do it because you showed great emotions on the last paragraph. Even if you want her to have self control then show the struggle of enduring it.