Reviews for Invisibility
albusnimbus chapter 1 . 1/6/2015
I enjoyed your poem. The "frosted glass" was an interesting metaphor, as well as the paradoxical sentence about "touching yet not touched". Your organization is atypical and it gives different accents on specific words, which I like. The last sentence stands out well. The diction feels neat and crisp and conveys the necessary thoughts without rambling. Overall, good job. I suck at constructive critiquing, so I'll get at what comes to me as the "good points" ;) Thanks for the reviews, too.
blank account - not using chapter 1 . 9/23/2014
Really nice poem! I like the diction. If there was anything I could suggest, it would be to possibly add some punctuation in a few more parts just so it is overall easier for the reader to, well, read and not just a run-on. :)