this was a cool poem, if it had a good tune it would make a great song. Very sad, very still and the use of repeatition with verses, adds a sense of importance. good job.-keep writing

good job! have you written anything else? -goes to find out-

It sounds beautiful, consider making it a song.

ah! Im addicted! I love this one the BEST! Your songs kick mine in the ass!

Very good! I am afriad someone will take my song anmd get big money for it so I can't post. YOu are brave! Great work. Email me.