Reviews for My Family's Mistakes
R.D.Palmgren chapter 1 . 8/29/2014
One great thing about poems...no rules, write however you want to write, no right or wrong.

I still think there should be some kind of order, some type of group system to help reader follow along and understand more clearly.
I felt like you were all over the place with this poem even though I understood what you were saying.
Here is an example of what I like, feel free to use it if you want, your words, I just changed it around a bit.

Voices, voices, voices
“Poor girl is doomed to make her mother’s mistakes.”
“I bet her temper is like her father’s, watch out for that one.”
Words that keep on swirling within my head

Pillow soaking from tears,
Tears that came pouring like the rain
A storm that wouldn’t stop
Tears shedding throughout the night

(Like I said, no right or wrong.)