Reviews for Demon's Embrace
TheFallenMoon chapter 1 . 4/18/2017
Interesting story. You seem to have left out the 'Comedy' tag.
BookWyrm99 chapter 1 . 5/15/2015
I'm intrigued by this story, but it's just written a bit strangely. Once sentence will be in past tense, and the next is in present tense. I would suggest picking one, and using the other sparingly. Also, some events seem to progress too quickly (Rajiro and Laura have dinner in about a paragraph) while other events are drawn out (it takes a lot of time- relative to other events- for him to get down to the dining room, out of bed, etc.).
Of course, continue to write in your own style. I think your ideas and plot are great! Thanks for writing!