Reviews for Children of the Star Breather
Scott Pilgrim chapter 2 . 10/3/2015
"...,and while they've been wrong most of the time,..." You forgot to add a comma after the and in order to denote the clause.
"...,and, while they've been wrong most of the time,..."

"...rumors telling part dragon, and part human." No comma needed here, also need to add of.
"...rumors telling part of part dragon and of part human."

"...scratchy rubble..." Should be changed to "stubble" here

"Hm." said the puzzled king." Forgot the comma.
"Hm," said the puzzled king."
J.A. Cadelina chapter 4 . 11/6/2014
This was a good story. I liked it because it has comedy and adventure. It's very vividly written that I feel as if I'm in the story itself.