Reviews for As Absurd As The Theatre Is
Jalux chapter 1 . 2/28/2015
Well I can see what you meant by common language when you reviewed my piece. You definitely have a way with words here and while some people might be offput by it's lack of clarity but I think it works brilliantly for this story as it's where a good portion of it's humor stems from. I believe this is something more aimed at literature nuts rather then your Average Joe?

The ending is quite powerful actually, it's a nice piece of self reflection as he describes his loneliness and it sounds of completes the story as he decides the theatre is not for him (not sure if he's talking an actual theatre or does the theatre symbolize a part of his life?). Last but not least I think it's clever how you sectioned out this story as it makes for a smoother read.
this wild abyss chapter 1 . 11/23/2014
You evidently have a wide and expansive vocabulary, which you like to use—but in doing so you're sacrificing clarity and accessibility for your prose. This piece is very dense, with a lot of abstract, nearly indecipherable imagery that doesn't come together to form a cohesive whole. Regardless of its abbreviated length, a short story should still have some sort of conflict established, and though I feel like you've made gestures toward that in places, it's hard to tell underneath the sheer bulk of words you provide. Your prose isn't bad, but it's very purple and indulgent, and I think you'd be able to reach more readers if you wrote more simply. That being said, the way you've pieced this out into smaller sections does make the text more palatable, and I'm glad you did that.

Another thing you might consider would be to bring this narrator into sharper focus. You've provided a lot of images, but the character's own emotions remain obscure. If you invested more strongly into the human aspect of the piece, it might be easier to connect with.
alltheeagles chapter 1 . 11/15/2014
For the RG EF

I’m not sure if this piece should be interpreted figuratively or literally, so I’m going for the latter because I can’t see the metaphor if any. So anyway, I rather like the tragi-comedic tone of the narrative, even if I’m not completely sure what the main point is. I’m imagining the narrator as a pierrot, because somehow the narration suits that character.
I also like how you evoke the controlled chaos behind the scenes through the language. It verges on the disjointed and yet there is a certain order, it almost seems ungrammatical yet it still makes sense. I have no experience or knowledge of the theatre, but it seems to me that the general attitude portrayed here is one of jaded disillusionment and even bitter disdain, and it’s commendable how you show this without mentioning the actual feelings in the text.