WooHoo! Another chapter! So glad Kailey didn't run and instead stayed to listen to Duncan's explanation. :) So sad about his brother and about the plight of his people. I liked Kailey's defense of human behavior. That's something I wouldn't have considered. I also liked your description of Duncan's physical traits and of the restaurant.

Thanks for posting. :)

Love this story! Keep up the excellent work!

Once he got going he did a decent job of explaining things. I'm glad she took things into consideration and has pretty much accepted him for who/what he is.

Oh, the TENSION in this story! SO. MUCH. TENSION! I'm going crazy here! Update soon!

Oh wow! Very interesting chapter! I didn't expect him to have pointy ears. Too bad Kailey didn't get to keep the stone. That was so mean, tossing it back into the ocean. :( LOL I'm glad Kailey's memory came back though. Hopefully, that means she didn't suffer any permanent damage. Can't wait to see what happens next.

You have surprisingly few errors considering you are writing for nano. :)

Well that's one way to start a conversation. If she'll just keep in mind how much he's been helping her since she fell - he can't be that bad of a guy.

So intrigued! If this were for sale I'd buy it! Can't wait to read more!

So Duncan's from the Welsh borders? Knowing you, he's based on some genuine folklore...

I love the way he starts planning a future with Kailey without even realising it. And how he's so hurt when she says she kissed him because she's been under stress. I love the line about him being certain he won't stop wanting her. And I love the way you've set it up so that he can't have sex with her without revealing his true self.

Both of them head over heels, very amusing. Duncan not getting his way is also very funny to read, I'm sure that's the first time he's had a woman turn him down. And Kailey for trying to rationalize the entire thing is pretty standard fare. Very well done writing though, descriptive without over-doing it and your characters are excellent. Very much looking forward to more.

Rain

I don't know whether to be like "Aww..." or "Damn!" There relationship is super amazing and I am happy Duncan has come to terms with it. Now it's someone else's turn!

Very wicked moment :) I'm glad he's accepted the inevitable - she'll need just a little more convincing. I think the Island sounds like a wonderful place for Kailey, someplace she could relax and just enjoy herself & life for once.

Side note - I absolutely love your long chapters.

Ooooh, that was a hawt time in the tunnel! Enjoyed that very, very much. I'm so glad that Duncan is supportive of her. I was attacked this last July and everyone thought I was being paranoid when I said my attackers were stalking me. They found out different with their own eyes, but it is terrible to not have the support you need when you are frightened. So, I can sympathize a lot with Kailey. I'm really glad that Duncan doesn't see her fears as abnormal and actually tells her. Thanks for that. :)

I enjoyed the trip to the cave as well. You have so many opportunities for elaboration in this chapter. It will be great when you have more time to flesh it out into a finished manuscript. :)

Ach! A cliffie! LOL I'm glad that Duncan has decided to entertain himself by protecting Kailey. :) Oh wow! He's gotta be super strong to move a tree that big! Haha, Kailey is finding lots more stuff than he is. I hope their little trip didn't just get ruined. Thanks for posting!

I agree with Duncan: somewhere isolated is the last place she should be! This is my favourite chapter so far. We're getting to know and care about the characters, and you're building up the drama nicely. I really like all the hints you keep dropping about Duncan's nature without actually telling us what he is - hunting humans, eh?

And thank you for dividers you've added when the POV changes! It was perfectly understandable before, but it's much easier now.

Steve is a "no selling waste of space". A cold hearted, cold blooded killer and she should have never been encouraged to go anywhere alone. So glad Duncan's taken up her cause. :)