Great plot and detail.

This is very interesting. I enjoyed readying

Clever. The story is very interesting and I like the shift of the feelings the first and last chapter go through.

Jesus Christ... It's always the quiet ones

Good start I want to see more please
Continue this please

Interesting story line. Really good.

I really liked your story! It was well-written and a good length...not too long that it bored me but not too short that it couldn't develop appropriately. I also liked that you restated the introduction as a conclusion...good stuff!

I really like your story. It has a lot of detail and that makes the story.