What!? Over? Noooo! I love this thing!

CHAPTER 1 REVIEW

So firstly, congratulations on your concept, because it's awesome. I myself am writing a book in which the main character is a fire conjurer, and I've been considering a sequel somewhere down the line of a kind of academy for the elemental wielders, but once Avatar: The Last Airbender got the same idea, it seems like everyone else is running with this and I fear I won't be able to write something as good as what everyone else is doing.

I apologize for getting off track. Your first chapter is great, it's not too lengthy and it drew me right in. I like the way everyone speaks, and the writing is neat and orderly, even from the perspective of a young woman who seems a bit moody, but in a likable way. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens, and good luck with Writing Month! (also feel totally free to read my book currently in progress, which has *sniffle* no reviews yet!)

It was a bit fastpaced here because the King trusted almost immediately.

It's okay that it's short. I liked it that way, to the point. Please keep updating as I cannot stop reading this!

Nice, but some sentences were really boring: I walked upstairs, went down again, went to the plaza, my parents wished me good luck. If these bland descriptions serve some purpose, such as to emphasize her boredom or solemn personality, fine. But if not, they kind of kill the story.

this is amazing, would you mind if I did a reading of it?

Amazeballs! (this is not an insult, it's a compliment)

Wow! Plot twist!

Now it's getting interesting! A little twist! I like it.

I CANNOT stop reading! Too freaking good!

It's very good so far. A five stars out of five stars.

This was really, really good.

I like where the story is going.

This is a very, very, very, very, very...(one hour later)good story. I'd like to see what'll happen next.

Very interesting to read, though I spend some time to understand what a wielder really does.
Expecting to see how their everyday lives are, thanks for the posting