Reviews for The dark, desert nights
zagato chapter 34 . 2/9/2019
Thank you for this amazing story!
zagato chapter 21 . 2/9/2019
This is wonderful, awkward at first but beautiful, thank you!
poeticjustice222 chapter 34 . 6/3/2017
Although I partly enjoyed the story and the writing, I must say I couldn't help having an unsettling feeling all through reading it. As a concerned reviewer, I feel I have to point it out to you/the readers - thus I hope you will not take this too personally.
I'm not sure if it was your intention or not, but I find it disturbing how Leylah never really dwells further on the fact that Azrahir slaughtered her entire family in cold blood once she begins growing closer to him. (Nor that she ever truly thinks about or misses them, especially her younger brothers?). Sure, she is wary of Azrahir, even afraid of him, but that doesn't exactly heighten the romance either once it gets started. Overall, there are some dangerous undercurrents of the Stockholm Syndrome (i.e. “a form of bonding between a captive and captor in which the captive begins to identify with, and may even sympathize with, the captor” and sometimes vice versa). Something that cannot easily be explained away, no matter the time period or the fictional setting or the slow burn of the story and their relationship. She STILL develops all these feelings while being held captured and against her will, and again, as you point out to the reader often enough, out of fear and apprehension towards her dominating captor (however much he acts on the orders of someone else). The fact that he tries to and eventually 'earns' her trust by getting physical with her (Ch 14-15), somewhat forcibly, should set the alarm bells ringing. Is it really realistic that she will ever come to truly trust him?
I'm sorry to be such a brutal spoilsport for what could otherwise have been a great fic - had you just tackled certain essential elements of the situation a little differently. Maybe having Leylah be more troubled by the loss of her family and less forgiving throughout the entire story and let Azrahir earn her trust differently? Maybe even have them fall in love but, in the end, let her decide to walk away because she cannot forgive him for his actions against her family and he cannot forgive himself; both of them understanding that it would forever remain a dark shadow over their heads as long as they stay together and thus taint their love?
Guest chapter 34 . 9/7/2015
That was beautiful- the entire story, really. It's 5 in the morning and I need to get up in 2 hours, but it was worth it. :)
ajashire1 chapter 34 . 4/2/2015
This was great! Wanna read the squeal now, I can't wait to see Leylah all in boss mode. XD
Thanks for the read.

Guest chapter 12 . 3/31/2015
"tearing her hair off" Should have been...out ! not off
Eros chapter 1 . 3/22/2015
Wow that first chapter has me hooked. You have a talent I haven't seen on here yet. The way you string your words together making them flow into a vivid imagery is amazing. I normally don't write reviews but this was too good to resist. I'm itching to continue reading and hope you dont stop writing either.
WrenwithaPen chapter 34 . 3/15/2015
I loved it! I'm a huge Assassin's Creed fan and this definitely did have that kind of feel to it (The first one, set in the Middle East). I clicked on this story just out of curiosity, but I'm so glad I did! I read it all at once and am now super inspired to either write or work on some interpretation of the Sherokahn uniform.
Suzuko chapter 34 . 2/5/2015
I really liked this story! It was exciting and lively But dark as well. it even had a great flow and a great story line. some of your sentences had an awkward flow but it was not too bad. i did also notice you used the word "Nailed" a lot when words like "pinned" or even held would have worked just as well and not initiated my internal counter.

All in all i give it 9/10 and wish you happy writing! i hope you continue to make great stories like this one!
Esther chapter 34 . 1/30/2015
Wow! You really really really did foreshadow Azrahir "killing" her from the start of the story, but Leylah's method didn't even occur to me. That was masterfully done! Another impressive thing is that I was still open to the possibility of Elazar winning up until Leylah's plan worked.

And Leylah is the Mistress of the Brotherhood, now? Hm... Interesting. I just hope she hasn't gone completely cold like this last chapter made it sound like she had. Azrahir is part robot-but Leylah wasn't. I hope she still has compassion. Her being the Mistress definitely does explain why she doesn't want to return to the public eye, at least.

I can't wait until you start posting the sequel! I'll be keeping an eye out for it :) Until then, I'll miss these characters and this world.
C0HR chapter 30 . 1/30/2015
I'm sorry! I didn't mean to make you think you did the chapter wrong! You didn't give me or anyone a wrong message. I'm just kinda girly in the way that I think pregnancy is cute.
Valinedel chapter 34 . 1/29/2015
I am so honored you dedicated a chapter to me! Oh it was sweet justice! Just like I had hoped for! Even though you still have some loose ends, it reminds me of what you would read at the end of a published novel. A fitting ending and yet enough to make the reader buy book two. I am still blown away that English isn't your first language. So Qadir really died of illness, or is that another cover. Guess I'll have to read the sequel!
Valinedel chapter 32 . 1/29/2015
Quick note for chapter 32...her "hair" tickeled his face...not her "hear" ;-) hehe
GREAT chapter! I didn't see that coming but loved how everything came full circle. On to the next chapter...
Esther chapter 31 . 1/27/2015
Wow! I was not expecting this attack. Everything is starting to make sense now, though. Because we'd already confirmed that Vahan being Leylah's father would be useful in letting Leylah stay married to Azrahir, but when Leylah escaped Elazar's camp, I was wondering how they would make use of the fact.

I really really like how you lured us into thinking the Sherokahns had almost one, then surprised us again by how much influence Luvor has. I can't wait to see how everything works out!
Valinedel chapter 30 . 1/23/2015
Much better. :) two things I wanted to point out

"leylah began to feel his silence uncomfortable." - This is an odd sentence to read. Perhaps it would be better as " Leylah began to feel uncomfortable due to his silence" or "his silence was starting to make her feel uncomfortable" or "the weight of the silence was beginning to make her feel uncomfortable"

The other sentence might be a cultural thing, but in the states, we take horses to their stalls not cubicles. (It made me laugh bc we use "cubicles" usually in reference to a small office work space divided by partitions)
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