I just finished your story and I thought it was great. I liked the ending and how it leaves a little room for a romantic happy ending. I hope you continue with these characters.

This story was... wow. I read all the 40 chapters one after the other without stopping. I'd love to read more about them, if you ever feel like doing so.
I noticed some continuity problems (for example in one of the first chapters Daniel says that he and Melanie lost their virginities to each other, but then he says that Melanie loses her to Damien; there were others but my memory works quite badly xD), they were minor things but left me wondering sometimes. Probably you'd be able to correct them without changing anything in the main storyline.
It was really a wonderful story overall. Good Job!

The ending was predictable but hey I didn't know how they where gonna meet but it was still cool . 15 years is a long time before they meet again but then again I'm not complaining . They still got to meet in the end and you could see that there was no love lost . Will be looking forward to the sequel or one shot from this story . I have come to love jayden and daniel so much that I hoping they get their happily ever after . Its been a lovely journey with you and I hope you publish this novel and show the world your talent and share it .

I loved it , from where their story began to where it ended it was truly a remarkable an amazing story . I have come to love this story and all the trials and tribulations of their love story . You are a remarkable author and I hope you publish this novel later on . You have a way with words and feelings , and from the first chapter to got me hooked and waiting patiently for updates . You don't just say it you express it in such a way that you capture your readers and they don't really wanna put the phone down until they have read the entire chapter . I do hope you make a sequel to this , that would be lovely .

lmI'm just going to sit back and wait for the next installment of Daniel and Jayden. I want more.

Well first I'll apologise for only reviewing now when I've enjoyed your story so much. At some points I was obsessively checking for updates and the daily updates were a blessing.

I hope you won't mind if I give constructive criticism.

I loved Daniel's character and Jaydens for the most part. He was just a really nice person, and his emotions were relatable.
I love how you built their relationship slowly and realistically, and the depths of their feelings was really apparent and great to watch grow.

Since the rest of the story was so realistically written and relatable I did find the Jayden's family two separate deaths and Daniels parents beating him at odds with the rest, as it almost seemed too over the top and unbelievable. However I liked the way Jayden did suffer emotional repurcussions after his mum and sisters deaths, which was realistic .

I wanted Jayden to mature slightly emotionally in the way he treated Daniel. Not the teasing etc, I loved that, but in the way all the mistakes in their relationship seemed to come from Jayden, and he never seemed to properly realise or rectify that. Daniel would just forgive him because he's so nice, and he seemed to make a lot more sacrifices etc. However this is a minor thing because like I said i did just love their relationship.

Persoanlly, I really dislike such time gaps in epilogues. I mean it was realistic that time should have passed, but 15 years is a hell of a long time, it seems like too much time has gone between them. After about eight they both could have finished studying and navy and found each other again.
Plus after all their to-ing and fro-ing, they didn't officially get together at the end which is why I'm absolutely hoping there's a sequel and or one-shots as you suggested.
That'd be so great because these characters and their relationship was so great I'd hate to have to let them go yet :)

Thankyou for such an enjoyable read :) I'll cross my fingers for a sequel or a lot of random one-shots :)

I love the ending. It wasn't THAT predictable- I mean, I knew they were going to meet, but I didn't really know if it would end with them making out or just, week, sweet and simple like this. I think I prefer sweet and simple anyway.

Keep writing. Looking forward to more of your stories.

I'm surprised I stuck with this one. I wouldn't mind a oneshot of this...would certainly be interested in why Bethany and Jayden had kids with each other. I would hope Danny would wonder the same thing. I expected them to meet up again, but not like this. Good story. Looking forward to the next one, if it's slash again.

wow. that is literally all i can say right now. i can't believe it's over :-( i got so used to coming home every day and reading the new chapters. this was such a great story, i loved the ending! thank you for writing this

Wha... I-its ending? Must not cry, must not cry... I honestly loved this story, and I hope there is a happy ending...

Keep writing. I think I am going to miss Jayden and Daniel. I was eagerly waiting for each chapter. Good luck

I want going to leave a review, but since you asked... this story is really good. Some romances will have lulls where the plot stops, but this one didn't. Some will have way too much fluff and no emotion. This one was perfectly balanced. Some have a terrible plotline... I must say, this is one of the best plots I've read in a while. And, to top it all off, you've got the Gift. It means you can string words together in just the right way, making it so that nobody can put your book down. If I were you, I'd seriously consider publishing.
I hope that made you a very happy author, cause every word is true.

Loved it , wow jayden is really taking everything badly he really needs to express himself and talk to a shrink and get all his feelings and emotions out no use keeping it bottled up it doesn't more harm then good . He tried to kill himself oh my god can he ever do something like that I get he just wanted to bleed to death but come on . Its like he doesn't get a break , every corner there's something wrong . I'm glad daniel's speech was awesome quite a master piece he spoke his mind and he got the applause he deserved . At least his parents slowly coming around and their proud of him ..its one step at a time . Can't wait for the next chapters . Thanks for updating and no need to apologize when you blow our emails like that its a good thing .

lol. i can sense something here. :D