I'm actually quite into this, awaiting the moment that all of the romance and stuff happens, they seem to be mortal enemies right now.

this is bullshit! i want more! i want the whole book plz continue with this story i beg of you

Your story is better than most I've been reading for the past few days, I'll give you that. The premise isn't too uncommon, but I'm looking forward to how this will spell out. However.

There's something that's been bothering me about your style and after giving it some thought, I think it's all comes down to the phrase every writer has probably heard of: "Show, don't tell."

Of course, doing so excessively isn't very good, but I feel your story can use a bit more showing instead of sentences like, "Suddenly, I knew what was going on." Frankly, it's cheesy, and it ruins the mood. Varying sentence structures help capture and keep attention as well.

Good luck with the writing. c:

Indeed what a good story it is! Please keep it up :)