Reviews for Unattainable |
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![]() ![]() The ending was the BEST! Seriously I absolutely loved the girl's personality and how hard the boy was trying so that he doesn't screw up. The way she's so helping and how it hurts him to belong to a lower class. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't know why I haven't discovered this sooner. I really enjoyed reading this story. Blake and Cecilia are so sweet 3 |
![]() ![]() Sweet :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is so beautiful and lovely:) |
![]() ![]() I really really liked this one. Seriously great! |
![]() ![]() So so amazing. I really loved this. Great job! |
![]() ![]() Ds was rily good,I haven't reviewd since foreva BT Ds gt me |
![]() ![]() ![]() My heart just aches every time I read about couples who shouldn't end up together. This gives me so much hope because people like Blake and Cecelia are who I live for. They don't care about anyone and do what they want. I love this. Great job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Marvelous! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was an amazing story to read and I sincerely enjoyed every second of it. I think it's amazing that you can go from writing a story like Philip Phillips to this! The world you created with these characters was unforgettable and I loved the characters. I think my favorite part of the story was the very beginning where Cecelia completely exceeds Blake's expectations. Oh and I loved that awesome one-liner that you ended the story with. I think it was a perfect way to wrap up everything, and I'm really glad you chose to end it that way. Also, I really enjoyed the pacing of their relationship. Nothing about the way they came together appeared unrealistic, which can be difficult to do in a one-shot and a smaller amount of words. But you did it beautifully, and I really enjoyed seeing Cecelia become frustrated and how Blake reacted and everything was just really well done. So glad that you participated in the Star Crossed round! Your entry was really really amazing and was for sure a close call compared to the winning story! Can't wait to see what else you come up with :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonderful little story! I like how you did the whole relationship and not just part of it-it makes the story feel more complete. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your prose is absolutely exquisite. Throughout the one-shot there was this lovely rhythm in your words and descriptions, particularly those of Cecilia and her beauty. The theme of forbidden love seemed very fitting for a prompt that asks for a R & J reference, so that was a well-written element. Something that left me a little bit confused was the description of the trees by the phone booth because the photograph doesn’t show any trees. Nonetheless, as the author, you have a right to creative embellishment. Lastly, I really loved the tie-in of “Who gives a fuck?” It just radiates the positive side of love in the wildest manner. Your one-shot earns ‘Honorable Mention’ for this prompt, so congratulations! Thank you so much for participating this round, and I hope you decide to submit again in the future. |
![]() ![]() Oh this was so beautiful. You're truly an amazing writer. |
![]() ![]() Perfectly written! I just love how you made them end up together in the end just yes! In fact I was just in the mood for reading a story with those Romeo Juliet-ish forbidden type of story plot and it's historical too which makes it even more amazing as that's really what I've been craving for lately so it's such right time that you posted this...thank you so much! Now to wait for your LAaS and PvP updates! |
![]() ![]() The ending was perfect |