Reviews for Moments
atalantea chapter 1 . 2/29
I am hoping I read it right but it seemed like a moment where bad news, like death, was shared and the personna decided to be a friend. Always painful but I think that moment was captured well in your piece. I like that the news was not so obvious. There was beauty in subtlety. I was left wondering though why the personna had to decide to be a friend instead of just being one automatically. Is it because they were not friends initially? It was interesting.

This line though seemed totological in that pain and hurt are synonymous. Maybe you mean physical versus emotional?

The hurt was there accompanied by pain

Anyway keep writing!
Ata
PoetOfSaiMiHunManKal chapter 1 . 3/9/2016
This was moving and a pleasure to read. I like how you started with the symbol of a candle and then went on to connect it to how people are often in need of companionship but oftentimes unable to get it. This poem also reminds me of the Erzya song "колмо штатолт" due to the symbolism of candles and emotional angst being the main theme. Is this a common theme in Uralic poetry?
Väga ilusam ja hästi kirjutatud! (sorry for my bad Estonian)
cassi crysta chapter 1 . 12/11/2014
This was really good. I just love the mood you set.